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Song Unsung, Alone
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Song Unsung, Alone |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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To get back what I never had to know what I have never known to reprise a song unsung and still this silence of alone. Perhaps it is just season's end, to pray for lover from a friend, so pained in heart that beats again... my king, he abdicates his throne. It would be better, not to feel... than sit and weep, tears cold as steel. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
This is simply a beautiful poem. I love the reference of the king abdicating his throne, what an image! Succinct and powerful, quite the combination! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To get back what I never had to know what I have never known to reprise a song unsung and still this silence of alone. Perhaps it is just season's end, to pray for lover from a friend, so pained in heart that beats again... ============== It would be better, not to feel... than sit and weep, tears cold as steel. =============== a chained angel cant fly a caged bird wont sing still the tears that fall are necessary... they heal the pain that the silence does bring. this silence is not forever this pain is not written in stone in time you will write your own songs and the harmony will be your own jm *********** you break me heart with this one me twin... i feel your pain... but as much as it hurts... we should never wish to not feel... then we cease to be a poet... Hugs me twin... me loves ya me There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
oh wow, have I ever felt and lived this...great expression of the feelings |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Serenity, This is a very sad one, but excellently expressed... regards, sudhir |
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Beverley Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 97England |
Serenity, every single word is beauty, every single line is a poem in itself, Altogether this is stunning. Lovely, sad, but lovely.  |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
Beautifully done! It would be better, not to feel... than sit and weep, tears cold as steel. |
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pramilasaran New Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 2bangalore, karnataka, india |
sad but nice poem. king abdicating his throne is a very good analogy for lost love prams |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Ah serenity ... sweetness doth flow from your softened quill ... beautiful ... |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Serenity,Serenity,...*sigh*. Full of sorrow, but beautiful words you created this poem with. You struck a chord in this heart of mine with the last part. "It would be better, not to feel... than sit and weep, tears cold as steel". ~To be numb at times of hurt. *sigh*. You rock S. Be well you. *Peace. *BTW,...the title stings me. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
excellently written Serenity, I hope everything is ok, big hug and smile. take care.  "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Want to thank everyone, however quickly, before SOMEBODY comes home, and pulls another internet addiction intervention scene on me...(I HATE when that happens) so just know that I thank you all much...your words in reply are dear to me, but not nearly as much as your words in your work...thanks, and hugs. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Serenity this poem was very heartfelt. Could feel the sincerity and emotion as it was written from the heart. Thank you Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Without a doubt, you are MOST welcome... |
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