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devina
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0 posted 2000-07-18 12:38 PM



Sorrowful neglect of He-
Whom the stars destined me in love,

Blinding pain- In such truth-
Wherein harshness shall dwell…

Of fingertips- Yours, upon my skin,
Shall I ring of defeat beneath your eyes?

Great binder of my soul- I retch in pain,
For I’ve given you yours, tenfold…

When naught else is shared, my dearest of loves-
I swallow your tears with mine own bleeding heart…

Shower not, your angelic graces upon my feet-
For I cannot bear your symbol- destiny be damned…

Suspended in air, but moments before,
I shamefully fall from my graces-

That I should love you…
If only from a far.




Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


© Copyright 2000 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-07-18 12:51 PM


HEY GIRL!!!!!!!!!!!!!
where you been...
so glad your back...
missed your cool poetry

"When naught else is shared, my dearest of loves-
I swallow your tears with mine own bleeding heart…

Shower not, your angelic graces upon my feet-
For I cannot bear your symbol- destiny be damned…

Suspended in air, but moments before,
I shamefully fall from my graces-

That I should love you…
If only from a far."

OH YES!! missed this for sure..
you alway write with that edge...
this is perfect to reflect you in the book
later-d-gator
jm



There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-07-18 12:53 PM


Devina, this is really intense...I like it.. voting here!    
Saunni
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West Virginia
3 posted 2000-07-18 01:37 AM


I agree, this is so very intense. Wonderful work.

Sauni

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2000-07-18 09:41 AM


I ditto the above!!  voting  
tracie66
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5 posted 2000-07-18 09:44 AM


Hey Devina I think alot of us have missed ya gal but so glad you're back this is such a wonderful piece  
Great submission
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Butterflies_dont_cry
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6 posted 2000-07-18 09:47 AM



Written from the depths of your soul once
again...wonderful work~


serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-07-18 10:04 AM


Yea!!!  How the hell are ya, my sis?  have missed you much...and your sweet poetry...
Trew
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8 posted 2000-07-18 10:47 AM


So dark and intense...
Really quite overwhelming on the first read.
Excellent poem!

Justbleu
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9 posted 2000-07-18 01:10 PM


Yep quite intense....this is good!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Local Rebel
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10 posted 2000-07-18 04:59 PM


Intriuging blend of formal language and free form... kudos to the fair haired poet...  nice to read you again
Sven
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11 posted 2000-07-19 12:29 PM


Devina,
       if only we could love closer. . . but sometimes, it's just out of reach. . .

Simply wonderful my friend. . .  

----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Marge Tindal
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12 posted 2000-07-19 02:24 AM


LittleDevina~
Little soul ...
embracing you back within the fold.

'That I should love you…
If only from a far.'

Poignantly sad.

Great BIG Mama Bear *HUGS* !
Love you~
~*Marge*~




~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


devina
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Cali
13 posted 2000-07-19 03:55 AM


Janet- My deepest thanks to you sweetie...I've misses you all just as much!!!

Sharon- TY for the vote m'friend... Glad you liked!!

Saunni, Dark Angel- yah, I have to agree with Sharon alot myself..he he thank you much!!

tracie66- I'm back for a bit...missed you too hun...

Butterflies_don't_cry- always m'dear... TY

serenity- And just how the hell are you??? G* You KNOW I've missed you most my dear sis...you seem to be quite busy around here yourself...email me girl...tis been a long time!!! Love ya...

Trew- Glad to have caught your eye...hope your lovin the new site...I know I am!!

Justbleu- Thanks to you m'friend!!

Rebel- It's so nice to FINALLY hear from you again!! Hope all is well on your end...and I do tend to "blend" eh??? G* Much love to ya dearie...take care!!

Sven- you always seem to read me like a book my dearst of friends...and you're right about being "just out of reach"... YOU KNOW what I mean!!

Marge- Oh...I feel my karma generating after hearing from you...now that's a good sign, right? ROFL You knows I've missed your words of wisdom...drop me a line...we've some catching up to do!! Love you too...


Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
14 posted 2000-07-19 12:09 PM


Devina,
Like everyone else, I will stick to 2 words
Wonderful and intense...

regards,
sudhir

Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA
15 posted 2000-07-20 11:31 PM


This one reads like a classic.  The message is timeless.  You've got my vote!

It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Marina
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Pickering, Ontario
16 posted 2000-07-21 12:11 PM


Devina perfect for the book!!!  My vote!

catch you on ICQ girl!

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley


wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)
17 posted 2000-07-21 12:16 PM


hey D miss seein yuh votin here o yuh
HelmutB
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18 posted 2000-07-22 08:03 AM


That I should love you…
If only from a far.

And I cannot see "Why not"
An beautiful poem Lady "D"
So much passion in such a gentle heart




The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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