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Kyle aka Huck
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since 2000-07-16
Posts 63
Linn, MO USA

0 posted 2000-07-17 05:36 AM


You know you're my best friend,
Till the very end.
Trouble is the end came too soon,
I sit and think of you under the new born moon.
How could it be true?
I never got to say goodbye to you.
You jumped a rock and slamed into a tree,
Well now your soul is finally free.
That's what you always wanted to be free,
But can't you see?
That's not what I wanted you to be.
Not dead,
Visions in my head.
Your face so clear in my mind,
The answers so hard to find.
They told them to me,
But I just can't seem to see.
How you could have left me here,
Oh shoot here comes a tear.
More than one fall,
One for every game of ball.
One for every visit you made,
And one for the arcade.
One for your mom,
And one for that guy you knew named Tom.
One for your dad,
I know he's real sad.
One for each of your brothers,
There will be no others.
And a lot for you,
There was nothing you could do.
And a lot for me,
I just wish I could see....

© Copyright 2000 Kyle Finn - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2000-07-17 05:56 PM


This is a soft and tender poem...written very well...wonderful flow.
Reminded me of the time I received a call from the hospital...my oldest son was in the emergency room...he and a few friends were racing down a mountain...the driver lost control and the car went off the road...flipped over and was resting on the edge of a cliff area...my son received a severe laceration to his forhead....thank God he was o.k. ..I was so worried...the driver sustained no injuries....it could have just as easily been two dead teenagers.
I am so sorry for the loss of your friend if this is a true experience.  It is truly an excellent portrayal of a loss...James

UFgirl05
Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 10
Winter Haven, FL, USA
2 posted 2000-07-17 09:04 PM


I'm sorry about your friend, It makes me think about my vey best friend. She is probably going to move away to New York and I live in Florida. We tell everything to each other and I don't know what I'm going to do when she moves, we always used to talk about going to each others proms because if she didn't mve we would go to separate high schools but we made a plan to find dates for each other so we could be together at prom. but this was a very well written poem and it really makes you think about the people you love <3
Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
3 posted 2000-07-17 09:12 PM


Sad and beautifully written story of loss.
Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
4 posted 2000-07-17 10:14 PM


I know what you are going thru and its great that you can write abt it here

never say never

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