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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2000-07-16 02:36 PM


the electronic eye is asleep.
the electronic mind is dreaming.
the electronic soul is cold.
the electronic hands are moving.
the electronic eye is open.
the electronic mind is searching.
the electronic body is growing.
the electronic fingers are pointing.
the electronic soul is wavering.
the electronic throat is vibrating.
the electronic lungs are beating.
the electronic heart is pumping.
the electronic voice is speaking.
the electronic eye is blind.
beware-beware-beware-beware.
beware the electronic eye.


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ethome
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1 posted 2000-07-16 02:38 PM


The electronic eye is everywhere..Great poem!!!
serenity blaze
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2 posted 2000-07-16 02:41 PM


and some suffer from electronic cataracts...and an electic winkie-wink eye atchya!!!
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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3 posted 2000-07-16 02:59 PM




    
heres looking at you BSQ  

very cool poem ...
at least with this piece of technology
i can keep an eye on your poems
later-"big brother"-is watching gator  
me

  


There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

JulieAnn
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4 posted 2000-07-16 03:23 PM


I liked this alot...i think it would make an excellent heavy metal song....I could hear Matallica singing it......With of course alot of electric guitar between the verses....Great JOB!!!  

Julie :)



bsquirrel
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5 posted 2000-07-17 12:21 PM


Thanks, everyone. And JulieAnn, if this were a Metallica song, it'd need to whine about Napster and then explain how all creativity peaked after Master of Puppets was out; by the black album, they decided radio was a friend.

Mike

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