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The Snake Charmer
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The Snake Charmer |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Snake Charmer With snake charming poems he captures your ear Then with spicy devices, entices you near They stimulate, fascinate, captivate you Elevate, saturate all that you do How clever his verses allure and secure You attention that’s sure to endure evermore He captures your mind with phonetics of sound Magnetic, aesthetic, poetically bound He writes with a magical, mystical quill His artistic advances fatalistcally thrill Hypnotic, exotic, erotic and deep Are like a narcotic to put you to sleep They sensitize, tranquilize, paralyze you Til you fantasize dreams about to come true Hypnotized, mesmerized, totally charmed Captured, enraptured, completely disarmed How bewitching a poet whose talents transcend To seducing your heart with the stroke of a pen But he thinks you’ll appear at the wave of his wand The problem before you, is how to respond If the snake charmer thinks he can have and eat cake And you just don’t like playing the part of a snake You need never respond, there is nothing to say Just show a few fangs, dear, he’ll slither away Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-16-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent work! Put together in the finest of style and rhyme. By the way, we're not all that bad you know, some of us are truly sincere. I have no interest in snakes but there are many qualities that the girls possess that I am quite enamoured with. I really do like the mystic overtones of the content, very special indeed. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Amen Sister  |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I'll drink to that ( coffee of course ) excellent poem Elizabeth 'two thumbs up'  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, you did brilliantly with this one, Liz. This is one of those poems where I read it and say "Darn! Why didn't I think of that!?" Of course, you know they say that the snake is charmed by the movement of the horn and not the music....so if you stay away from horny fakirs, you should be ok  |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
oooh, Liz; This is so incredible! Now you've got me nervous, so far I haven't felt the slightest bit charmed by anyone's poetry, not in the way you portray it. But from now on I'm on the alert for the snake that might slither my way, and I will heed your wise advice, and ignore the scoundrel! HAHA! Dear sweet friend, I love the clever wording in this poem. You do have a way with words! Love and hugs, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elisabeth, I don't know how it is possible but keep getting better and better. I agree with Balladeer. Love Sy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Wow!!!!!! i hate it when that happens.... hope it doesn't happen to me... geesh... what a poem, Liz well written captivating verse, without a doubt |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
THISssssssss ISssssssss Ssssssssso like you ... well done. |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Very clever, Liz! I'm afraid I'm still practicing on dew worms. Still no response... Marvelous poem, structured and witty! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very creative idea and a fantastic write...you have such a fine command of all those big beautiful words...do you have any names for us...who are these snake charmers among us? Are they all guys? Come on just one name...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
While stay at an arm's length one must, Wary of tricks of many a snake charmer, 'Tis my aim to remind you of some trust, If placed on the right one, you will live a life charmed... Not all men are charmers of snakes as of course not all women are snakes... interesting thoughts though... so you see this is another thought-provoking poem from you Liz.... Many regards, sudhir |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another great masterpiece to add to your growing collection! Fantastic, Elizabeth! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He writes with a magical, mystical quill His artistic advances fatalistcally thrill Hypnotic, exotic, erotic and deep Are like a narcotic to put you to sleep They sensitize, tranquilize, paralyze you Til you fantasize dreams about to come true Hypnotized, mesmerized, totally charmed Captured, enraptured, completely disarmed How bewitching a poet whose talents transcend To seducing your heart with the stroke of a pen But he thinks you’ll appear at the wave of his wand The problem before you, is how to respond ================= I say bring it on baby LOL...  oh Liz..you know I cant resist the charms of a poet nor can i resist the delish rhyme of this gem...superb... the rhyme builds and picks up tempo as the poems moves along... excellent work here... later-poetry-queen-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This poem was just written in fun, not referring to any poet I know. In fact all the male poets at passions are very charming, alluring, and respectful. (And Passionate, thank goodness), and I love you all. There's not one snake charmer in the bunch, although your poetry is sometimes very enticing, but always in good taste. We've got a great bunch of men on Passions. Thanks for all of your your remarks Liz |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Well.. I think Jeffrey couldn't have said it better. !!!! gotta love that poem.. Luv,< !signature--> Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 07-17-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Liz--This poem is wonderful...and so are you! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Liz, loved this poem wonderful. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lynne, Martie, Brian, Thank you for your charming remarks Glad you liked it Liz |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Elizabeth* This is fantastic!! I loved the flow of this one and I thought the idea was Perfect!! You are the Queen of weave~ |
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