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LoveBug
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0 posted 2000-07-15 11:45 PM


As a young girl, she would dream
About fortune and fame
She also felt a deep desire...
Something she couldn’t name

She dreamed of happiness and bliss
She could name them all but this

With the years, the desire grew
Along with her chances of fame
As she made her way to the top
She dreamed the dream without a name

Closer to happiness and bliss
In sight was everything but this

Finally, she made her break
And jetted to her fame
And the entire time, she longed
For the dream without a name

Possessing every single dream
But she was missing something, it seemed

Reaching out to touch their star
They’re screaming, all the same
All the time, she is reaching out
For the dream without a name

Everyone around her cares
But there’s still something that isn’t there

She got married to a model boy
That just seemed so sweet
At first, she thought she’d found the dream
That would make her life complete

She had everything, it seemed
Everything but the nameless dream

She grew old, and was ready to die
She had long ago lost her fame
Her final day, she prayed one prayer:
To know her great dream’s name

Before she took to the heavens above
The whispered answer came to her...

Love



"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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Alwye
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1 posted 2000-07-15 11:54 PM


Wow my friend...this is extremely powerful and so true...wonderful work here, as always!  

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2000-07-16 12:09 PM


Very nicely done
I guess one would need to experience love before one would know what was missing from ones' life

Mistikman
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3 posted 2000-07-16 11:42 AM


Excellent work LoveBug   I thoroughly enjoyed this  
ethome
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4 posted 2000-07-16 11:52 AM


Good introduction, body and conclusion with well done lines and verses. The truth that escapes some featured in the last line proves the wisdom of the poem. Fortune and fame are'nt necessarily the answer to eveything. Excellent!!
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5 posted 2000-07-18 12:16 PM


Thanks for the replies, all! They mean a lot  

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Butterflies_dont_cry
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6 posted 2000-07-18 12:23 PM



Love Bug*
This is so deep and so beautifully written
but above all so sad.....such a shame she
had to wait so long for the mystery to be
revealed to her.....such is poetry    Thank
you so much for sharing this~

Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2000-07-18 07:56 AM


Excellent Erica!  You had me guessing throughout ... until you revealed her dream at the end. What a perfect message, and beautifully rendered. Loved this!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2000-07-18 08:00 AM


Before she took to the heavens above
The whispered answer came to her...

Love

===================
this is excellent story telling LB..
creative and wisdom filled
very cool weave...
loved the impact of the last lines
great writing
later-love-gator
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

Justbleu
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9 posted 2000-07-18 08:53 AM


Oh sooo sad LoveBug....but so very well written!!! Enjoyed this!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Mark Bohannan
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10 posted 2000-07-18 09:48 AM


Amazing and sad at the same time.  This one goes in my file.  Well done and beautifully expressed.
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