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Minnie Mouse |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Minnie Mouse Slams the door of the candle-lit room unable to look again at the couple as they lie, wrapped in each other's arms, after uncovering the secret betrayal Feathers, smooth and white, belonging to Daisy Duck, float seductively in the hall, mocking her as she runs, broken-hearted, out into the sunshine She has been living a fairy-tale life, her head in the clouds, deceived by the cute little ears and big white-gloved hands Teary-eyed and determined, she boards the bus leaving toon town, finding her seat among the street sweepers and ticket-takers "Let him keep his little fantasy," she thinks, as she heads out into the real world, "behind his squeaky-clean image, he is really just a rat". |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Poor Minnie! I guess Mickey was feeling ducky. At least he wasn't feeling goofy!!  Very creative....love it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'll second that, Debbie! Very creative! Denise |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very creative description of infidelity. Never seen it put quite like that. Too bad you had no rat trap in place. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Debbie.... That was great.....but I feel sorry for Minnie!! Nice work, and very unique........ Your words become music to my soul...... |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Thanks everybody, I feel sorry for Minnie too! I'd hate to see what happens when Donald Duck finds out...lol |
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Asma M. Ahmad Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 19 |
Aaaaaaaaaaaargh! A duck and a mouse!!!!! Lucky you got out minnie! Seriously,you've given cartoons and fairy tales a whole new meaning. Is this life really nothing but a cartoon?... Best wishes Asmoon "..Infinite passion and the pain of finite hearts that yearn." Robert Browning |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
This type of poem is called apocryphilia. I learned about it in a college class a couple of years ago. The idea is to choose a familiar character, like goldilocks, Job's wife, or Atilla the Hun and place it in an unexpected situation. The challenge is to try and surprise the reader, while keeping the story logical, and under 25 lines. I love to experiment with different styles of poetry and this type is alot of fun! Debbie |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is kind of a cool idea sticking disney characters into unexpected positions... watch out girls that crazy mouse is on the lose...he's out of control...and now Minnie's available...what would Walt Disney think about all this...ha..ha..James |
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Kyle aka Huck Member
since 2000-07-16
Posts 63Linn, MO USA |
That was very very creative, never looked at making a poem based on cartoon characters. Very intersting way of writing though, I liked it....  |
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