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The Lingered Wish
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The Lingered Wish |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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The Lingered Wish ~~~ Ten thousand pounds of solid rock crash down against the floor The beaming light of yesterday will never gleam ... no more The loss of several happy years collapse a fragile mind A heart destroyed before the dawn leaves bitter tears behind ~ Ten thousand dreams of days to come just dust clouds in the rain All scattered o'er the sea of tears where hopes are cast in vain The treasured sights together sought forsaken ... waste away Regardless of the lingered wish That quickly fades to gray ~ Ten thousand blissful days engram are lost for evermore The spark of love gives way to black and seals the heavy door Emotion froze to deathly state evades an approaching day But a heart encased in solid stone never bleeds again ... they say ~~~ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Awesome piece ... A nice flow and pace throughout ... Enjoyed greatly ... Thanks. m.a. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ten thousand dreams of days to come just dust clouds in the rain All scattered o'er the sea of tears where hopes are cast in vain The treasured sights together sought forsaken ... waste away Regardless of the lingered wish That quickly fades to gray -------------- Rex this is awesome writing powerful emotions and imagery love the continuing theme excellent work jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
awww...this was ten thousand times too sad...yet so beautifully expressed, Rex. ~~soft thoughts Maureen |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
m.a. ... Thankyou for the kind reply  Janet ... you're very kind ... thankyou Maureen ... thank-you ... for the soft thoughts |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ten thousand thank yous, Rex, for such a soulful piece...< !signature--> Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 07-16-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Rex, Ten thousand dreams of days to come just dust clouds in the rain All scattered o'er the sea of tears where hopes are cast in vain The treasured sights together sought forsaken ... waste away Regardless of the lingered wish That quickly fades to gray Some times I wish that I had a heart of stone so the pain would go away, but that would make me something I detest. A keep sake of mine this will be, Thank you for putting it so perfectly. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Rex; You have profoundly expressed the horror of a lost love and a broken heart. It is necessary for the heart to retreat, that it may heal and know love again. Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Simply beautiful Rex! The flow, the sentiments, the little tug of my heart when reading these words ... just wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit (PS ... now what were the chances of that ... 10:11am and we're both responding to each others poems at the same time!) [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-15-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Rex...such pain in so few words...hearts of stone never bleed but neither do they soar. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Rex this is so sad, and so true. Take heart it's true that's what is lost cannot return, but you never know what might be behind the next smile. Beautifully written as always. As an apprentice I can only stand and stare amazed.  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Rex, I still love it! They're right ya know. It is awesome! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
thankyou Sunny ... for the soulful reply You're very kind Cerenity ... after many years it still bothers me to look back Ellie ... Yes ...I know this to be true ... have been there more than once ... these were just old thoughts resurrected but thankyou ... you are right Kit ... thankyou very much ... I noticed that we had posted to each other at the same time ... could it be the twilight zone? Paula ... words of wisdom to be sure Thankyou Marsha ... you are so right ... the next smile you speak of ... has been with me now for over twenty years WhtDove ... thankyou ... you always help to brighten my days |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Rex, ya fooled me again. Here I sat, looking for the punchline and there wasn't one! Maybe THAT was the punchline. Excellent writing, good sir..... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very nice |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Rex~ Such a sad piece but one I think we can all relate to. Even after many years the heartache still appears every now and again and the memories flood back. Hearts slowly heal but are forever fragile. Love to you Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing Rex...hope for the best for you...James |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Balladeer ... LOL ... I really must get busy and write some new knee slappers ... thanks for reading ... perhaps the next one Prometheus ... many thanks to you for all your kind replies Tracie ... you are so right ... I read a few poems ... looking for pleasant reading and inspiration ... I find sadness behind each door and thus compose from my own pool of tears James ... thankyou ... wishing you the same |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
REx that was truely beautiful. A visual treat wonderfully written. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great writing Rex, truly powerful language. It's quite song like and lyrical. It comes right at you and hooks you right away. Love it man, love it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is awesome, Rex! Fantastic writing! Denise |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
brian ... thankyou so much ethome ... wow ... love your reply ... thankyou ... much appreciated Denise ... thankyou for always adding your support ... you are an awesome poet and your opinion means so much to us all |
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