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Hear My Cry
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Hear My Cry |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Hear my cry o darkened night give me taste of understanding... Tell me why o sweet white knight I feel the glove of reprimanding? Shall I quiver? Shall I beg? Whisper you, dream sweet to bed? My dreams are but a sea of sand... My heart, the stranger in strange land... Tell me how to make it right. Tell me, I might sleep tonight. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Shall I quiver? Shall I beg? Whisper you, dream sweet to bed? My dreams are but a sea of sand... My heart, the stranger in strange land... Tell me how to make it right. Tell me, I might sleep tonight ------------------- tears from your soul me twin a heart bleeding ... needing answers... prayers for s'en to know serenity me loves ya baby... looking south...singing a lullabye in the wind *kiss kiss* me There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very well done Serenity, much different than your normal style. I love this! I give you my shoulder to lay down your head and cry that sorrow out till you sleep with the angels. Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I guess I got caught up in it too... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 07-15-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is very haunting! There should be sound effects with it..the lonely cry of an owl..the wind gently blowing...very good!  |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Everytime I try to break away, I read something this good and I have to stick around for more ... thanks serenity ... My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A.M. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
lay thy head gentle goddess soft upon my heart let me sing thee a song finest example of my art a song of thy life sad but gentle a lullaby to ease thy pain to close thine eyes and help thee to dream dream of a life that might someday be guiding thy heart to a place in life's stream and showing you that life can be more than a dream. . . superb my friend. . . you heart shows in this one. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
wow, serenity, this poem is short but packed full with wonderful imagery...like the way you phrase "taste of understanding"..."glove of reprimanding" esp like "my heart, the stranger in a strange land"...short and effective, implying that the speaker doesnt know herself any more  thanx for the read |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey--thanks everybody, glad you enjoyed... but methinks me heart should close down for maintenance a bit...love to all...will be reading...be back next week...after "mercury goes direct..." |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
almost a prayer... very nice and serene *w ~~softly Maureen |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, Very well done, speaking from the heart you have done so perfectly, hurry back we will miss you. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Serenity ... I understand your words so well. This was just breath-taking and flowed so beautifully ... wonderfully penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Serenity-This was a heart touching beautiful piece, take care and hugs. |
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