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Shadow of Gray Cloud
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Shadow of Gray Cloud |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Lone hawk soars in troubled sky. Ciccada think it dusk--they cry beneath the shadow of gray cloud. With urgency, the Mother's need, ending of expectancy-- this is my storm, its' thunder proud. I weep. (I keen within the sound) muted by the roll of drum, birthing now, my life--undone... Cold in shadow of gray cloud, in candlelight, I count my seeds. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--this feels so mournful...like ticking time...strong, feeling poem...I liked it! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow sen powerful amazing i might add |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
With urgency, the Mother's need, ending of expectancy-- this is my storm, its' thunder proud. I weep. (I keen within the sound) muted by the roll of drum, birthing now, my life--undone... Cold in shadow of gray cloud, in candlelight, I count my seeds. ---------------- hmmmmm, very cryptic poem me twin...indeed. much to read between the lines here (and you know how I love that)  very deep and soulful... me thinks me will light some candles I feel a storm coming in myself... seems to be coming in from the south... deep south *winkie winkie* *sigh* me loves ya me There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Powerful poet yet far too much to understand in one reading. many angles to this one. Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Martie--I thank you for your understanding, that alone is a lovely compliment, and I thank you. walt----w.o.w. me friend...you always touch me heart... and me sweet twin JM--I want to be Thelma--you be Louise..."Auditions are now being held for the role originally played by Brad Pitt--see within for details--DEEP WITHIN." rofl...I spend alot of time rolling on the floor laughing...helps to pick up the dog hair... (serenity soft-shoes an exit right.) and rich, why are ya doing this? [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 07-14-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Wow ! Powerful pen ! 'I weep. (I keen within the sound) muted by the roll of drum, birthing now, my life--undone...' This lady likes it very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
As does this gentleman. . . Powerful words my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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