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Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

0 posted 2000-07-14 05:52 PM


As I look down below,
from my project window,
I see dark streets and crowded projects,
where violence is the logic,
where you could get stabbed or shot,
from bullets of a metal object.
Bums were roaming around the streets,
picking up cans and looking for food to eat.
Drunks in the streets,
were staggering left and right
after boozing all night.
The prostitutes were flirting with the addicts
and the thugs were eyeing for enemies,
and clutching their automatics.
As I continue to look down below,
from out my project window,
I see my neighbor, Mr. Quindow,
walking down the street,
looking at the shoes on his feet.
I said "hello" to him
but, he just looked up
and cursed me,
and continued to walk down the street,
shouting and using lots of profanity.
His problem was his big mouth
and like a candle, he's fixing to fade out,
as the liquor stores embraced him,
as he came everyday, so they used and wasted him.
He's also targeted by some street gang,
that he's owes money too
so he better straighten up,
or his life will shortly be through.
Anyways, the project is not the place to be,
and everyone in it, seems trapped to me.
I wished that I could fly away from this
because, I'm tired of living in it!!!
If my mind is the cake,
then my tongue is the candle,
as I'm praying to God,
as I kneel on this mantle,
wishing that my wish is granted,
so that I can be taken,
to the land of the enchanted.
My imagination was taking off like a kite,
so I took out my pen and began to write.
Outside, there was loud music
as the bums and drunks,
were fixing to lose it.
Despite the loud noise,
I continued to write and stay poised
as I looked at my poem
as I was so hooked to my soul's tune,
that I happily said,
"one day, I'll publish you soon.
My soul's melody, made hell sound so heavenly,
and if I don't watch out, jail would be,
the next step for me.
as I've always wanted, to be a part of,
what's out there
because, it's always been,
the music to my ears
as I've witnessed police shakedowns,
shootouts, and bloody playgrounds.
People, this is the life of a ten year old,
while staring out his project window.

© Copyright 2000 Nate Dogg - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
1 posted 2000-07-14 06:31 PM


Nate Dogg.........

   If I could vote a million times for this, I would!!! I always read your work, and the ones that you term "deep" certainly are, but
I crave them........so don't stop. They deal with humanity, in all it's harsh reality.
And a good dose of reality never hurt me,
              so far........

   Excellent work here......more, please....


My heart is an open book
....take a look....


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-07-14 09:12 PM


this is absolutely AWESOME
amazing writing
amazing depth and imagery.
this belongs in the book.
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-07-15 07:05 AM


Nate you have painted a visual panoramic picture of life in the projects...and I hope that 10 year old boy gets out of there...excellent writing...this is my second favorite of your poems...James
Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
4 posted 2000-07-17 02:30 PM


Wow, I didn't expect the respones that I got
but believe me, I truly love them! I'm loved to be praised for the type of poem that I write, the type of poems that comes from my heart and soul so that my readers can feel what I'm saying. Thank you Sunny, Janet, and Jimmy for reading and responding to my work.

Nathan

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-07-17 09:24 PM


Your words are certainly felt, Nate. Your descriptions are very vivid!

Denise

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
6 posted 2000-07-17 09:36 PM


Nate*
This is an amazing piece with all the ends
of the spectrum...the power within your
words is such an awesome gift, thank you for
sharing it~

Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
7 posted 2000-07-21 04:47 PM


Thank you Denise and butterflies for the wonderful comments.

Nathan

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