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Corazon
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0 posted 2000-07-14 02:25 PM


~you held me softly~

its days like these
when I look at this blank screen
in front of me
and remember
you
and how we found each other
in this tangled imaginary web
of people and
I remember our smiles
how we teased
and played
and how
sometimes when I cried
how you held me softly
while our friendship grew

the minutes sometimes
hours made me look forward
instead of back
we delved deep into  
hurt blackened souls
and we stuck bandaids
on with smiles
I remember how you were strong
enough for me
and for you
and how you held me softly
when I thought I could not stand

you asked me why
and you listened to my reasons
you helped me sort them
but you never judged
you helped me find
the answers I needed
for it was up to me to change
or not
and you held me softly
while you helped me
find a way to like
me

our passion rose
we needed touch
but found our arms
to be lacking
and so we held onto
the dream
of someday
but someday became everything
to me
and
someday never came
you fell in love with another
nothing we could do
no backspace or delete
for this one
but I remember how you held me
softly
while I fell apart

you helped me pick up the pieces
my best friend you will
always be
we found sunshine in our
fingertips again
and I remember how you started
to back off softly
as I grew strong

and now on days like these
when I know
really know
that you are gone
you needed to slip out of the tangles
the call of real life
took you from the imaginary
I know you weaned me softly
because you felt the need to go
but on days like these
I still miss you
don’t you know?



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 07-14-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-07-14 02:49 PM


oh how i wish i didnt relate to this one so well
well expressed emotions girl...
done very softly for sure...
some things just get under our skin...
great writing as always
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

2 posted 2000-07-14 02:49 PM


so compassionate and understanding of you Corazon ... Many lyrical phases ... my fav ...

we delved deep into  
hurt blackened souls
and we stuck bandaids
on with smiles

and ...

we found sunshine in our
fingertips again

thanks.


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-07-14 02:56 PM


So tender and soft...I can think of several times when I should have settled for a friendship but I kept pushing for more...and in the end it was not successful...I brought pain upon myself and later realized we should have never went past a friendship.. if only I could settle for the beauty of a friendship as you have...James
Balladeer
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4 posted 2000-07-14 03:13 PM


I always thought it would be impossible for me to pick out a favorite of yours because they are all so beautifully done. I was wrong. Regardless of all the wonderous poetry I am sure you will write in the future, this is the one that will first come to mind.......this is the one.
Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

5 posted 2000-07-14 03:28 PM


thanks guys, you are too kind...just needed to write this as my final goodbye, but yep he still remains...sigh

and bal...I know you love my poems, and I am flattered, but this last comment of yours really touched me ...thank you

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2000-07-14 03:32 PM


Soft,tender,sad, and heartfelt.  This is a rare gem to be treasured.
doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
7 posted 2000-07-14 04:07 PM


hey you!
it's just a leave of absence.... remember?

this one is written straight from the heart... but i have a feeling this isn't a "final goodbye"

the one thing i love about your writing, corazon, is your honesty and openness... i might try that myself one day... LOL


Corazon
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8 posted 2000-07-14 05:18 PM


well doreen, the door is not locked on my side, its just...you know...life, it has a funny way of pulling people farther and farther apart...sigh
thanks for the compliments  
gotta run for the weekend hugs

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
9 posted 2000-07-14 06:04 PM


Corazon......

    I love the way you wrote this. Everything
about it strikes the heart, especially if
familiarity is a personal one.
         Thank you for writing this,
           it helps remind me that
              to love, is to let
                   go.......


My heart is an open book
....take a look....


vandana
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10 posted 2000-07-14 06:09 PM


Nice work!!!!!I liked it a lot!!!!!
vandana
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11 posted 2000-07-14 06:11 PM


Nice work!!!!!I liked it a lot!!!!!
Martie
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12 posted 2000-07-14 07:28 PM


Corazon--A beautiful poem about love and loss and friendship...well done!
wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2000-07-14 07:30 PM


i just love the analogy nicely done corazon
RainbowGirl
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Posts 3023
United Kingdom
14 posted 2000-07-14 07:37 PM


In the dead of night and dreams there is no comment I can make that you haven't already said, bar one, the laughter will always live on and they, will miss out on the softness, the closeness that you spoke of...

Smile softly my friend the ache will die but your dreams will live on..

HUSG

Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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15 posted 2000-07-15 06:56 PM


thanks all so much, means a lot to me that this poem touched someones heart...  

and rg...yep, couldn't have said it better  

Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
16 posted 2000-07-15 07:11 PM


Wow, Corazon!  You know (at least you should) how much I love your work.  This one is outstanding in every way.  The tender way the couple came together, the tender way they let each other go.  Beautifully done!

It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



suthern
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
17 posted 2000-07-16 11:30 AM


This is outstanding, Corazon! A brilliant summary... written by a woman wise enough to embrace what was gained and enjoy those memories of happiness... even while acknowledging the pain of not getting what you wanted. *S* Beautiful!
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
18 posted 2000-07-16 12:29 PM


Friendship going both ways is great but love going one way is sad. You captured my attention from beginning to end.
I can tell from the tender hearted words that you are going to make a wonderful companion for some one.
Happens when you least expect it....BANG! right in the heart.
Well written mood in this poem thanks for sharing your deep feelings it's always good to let it all out.....ethome

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
19 posted 2000-07-16 03:15 PM


Corazon,

You have penned a great poem here... an emotional chord has been struck with some wonderful writing...


Excellent work,

regards,
sudhir

Corazon
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20 posted 2000-07-17 10:07 AM


thank you, so much, this was one of those i needed to write poems, didn't think it would be so well received.....but it does my heart good that it is

suthern...sure is good to see you   and thank you much girl  

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