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The Gods That Weep
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The Gods That Weep |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Left to lonely left unknowing a theft of comfort's vagrant wind... to love only-- a seed ungrowing-- Fortuna cast her wicked spin. Soma, too abandons me. Adrift, adrift in my bereave... Laughter of the Gods I seek. Adrift adrift remorseless sea... Pandora opened up the box-- but does a gift come wrapped in locks? Lovely love, in luscious lie, I opened box to crawl inside, and then Hope, too, abandoned me. O pleasure of sweet company-- where now are the Gods that weep? |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
That was amazing, I'm almost speachless. Very very well written. Sauni |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Left to lonely left unknowing a theft of comfort's vagrant wind... to love only-- ------------- Pandora opened up the box-- but does a gift come wrapped in locks? Lovely love, in luscious lie, I opened box to crawl inside, and then Hope, too, abandoned me. O pleasure of sweet company-- where now are the Gods that weep? ------------ its my party and I'll cry if I want to?.  oh me twin ... me knows .. me knows .. me knows that you know... me thinks we need to plant some new seeds ... poppys?(no, tired of being tired) roses? (no, too many thorns) butterfly bush?(yes, me likes)... sleep me twin... sweet dreams for serenity love ya-girl me There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks you Saunni--for that lovely yummy compliment---I'm having my coffee now, will be checking out your work as soon as I can type again...(backspace..yawn..lol) and Janet Marie--are you talking to me? Or are you talking to you? LOL....later-me-gator... |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
And you call me "deep" ... Whoa ... Very nice indeed ... Killer and a keeper ... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
(huh, where am I?) scratching my head, looking at 32 directions (i thought there were only 4 or maybe 8)... utterly lost... Amazing, this puzzle in my head. .whats caused it...  (slowly recovering) Oh PiP is where I am in, oh the depth of poetry here in unimaginable and oh!! someone hold me I am flying high....  (superman, I may call myself soon) Oh this poem gave me a rush too...  serenity, well done.... just now I realised that this is a sad poem and I am hopping around like a crazy nut.... a very great work here... regards, sudhir (back to sanity he he ) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
M.A.--thanks so much for reading, and the lovely reply-- Sudhir--I am now laughing like a crazy woman...you nut! What a great visual of you tho...I thank you, and if you were trying to cheer me up, you did a great job! thanks good people...serenity exits laughing... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
they have not yet abandoned you gentle goddess. . . superb poem. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
serenity, your work remind me of redheart angrybraids's poetry...i dont really understand both your poetry but they are beautiful nevertheless |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Peer into the box again---you will find hope will always be there.. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
serenity, absolutely stunning, an amazing poem, I think it this is one of my favourites of all of your wonderful poems I have so far read. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kaile--there was just a lot of mythology in this one...but thank you for reading... Sven--as always, I thank you for your kindness... Prometheus---not quite ready to look again... once burned, ya know? (t'hee! I guess you would know, giggles) I thank you tho, and will keep that thought in mind. brian madden--me irish prince of poetry, how I thank you for being so kind to me...you're the best... Thanks again, everyone... |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Nice work Serenity. Don't lock yourself up in the box tho.. hard to write in the dark Rich |
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