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Somber Canvas (A first attempt at Haiku)
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Somber Canvas (A first attempt at Haiku) |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN 
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Silver moon alone Drifting ‘pon somber canvas Sunlight caressed orb Myriad stars shine Within today’s shadowed vault Light of yesteryear Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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These are beautiful pieces, my friend. You should write haikus more often. Abandon the realm of prose!  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I certainly hope this will not be your last. I like! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Indeed most beautiful pieces...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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LoveBug
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Giving this a well-deserved *BUMP!* "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
What beautiful haikus Abe! You used space, which makes it all the more beautiful. I loved your images. Wonderful Job my friend! "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
brilliant first attempt...esp like the last line "Light of yesteryear"  [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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deb Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 44Reading, Pa., USA |
not bad for first! |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
This is a sweet poem, Abe! It's very cool, and I like it a lot. I fail to see the evidence that you are a terrible poet. Write more Haikus! Erin |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
*applause* Gorgeous Haikus my love! I told ya you could do it..they're fun, aren't they? I agree with everyone else, they better not be your last! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Thank you all so much for your comments, I really appreciate them! And give up Prose? Neva!  Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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