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Martie
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0 posted 2000-07-12 09:33 PM


(just playing around)

Love is a Mighty Thing


Love is a mighty thing
to its arrow she is tethered
yearning for its mad embrace
stakes her to her dream’s desire

yearning for its mad embrace
molds her movement through a day
she would gladly trip and fall
unto the path that true love takes

she would gladly trip and fall
and cross the mighty sunlit gorge
to reach its heather and its stream
molds her movement through a day

To reach its heather and its stream
and climb the mountain of desire
to hear the call of whippoorwill
under the tree in morning’s still

to hear the call of whippoorwill
she would gladly trip and fall
mold her movement through the day
for in its arrow she is tethered

To climb the mountain of desire
yearning for its mad embrace
under the tree of morning’s still
love is a mighty thing

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1 posted 2000-07-12 09:56 PM


Oh, jeez! and now...perfect structure. I'm gonna take up drawing cartoons.

Beautiful, beautiful.....

Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2000-07-13 03:31 PM


Martie,
Your putting us all to shame here. There must be a name for the verse, or did you invent the pattern of this verse, I am clueless and could never do it
Marvelous, Martie

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-13-2000).]

Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2000-07-13 03:38 PM


Oh my--what is it in you that finds such grace in bringing your words to life.  I am hunbled at your mastery and bow to you now in praise.  EXCELLENT VISION AND IMAGERY!!!!
jwesley
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4 posted 2000-07-13 04:33 PM


Well, as Balladeer put it, "oh, jeez"...

"just playing around", eh?  We're in super trouble if you ever get serious!  Wonderful, Martie, just wonderful.

jwesley

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5 posted 2000-07-13 06:15 PM


Balladeer--If this is perfect structure then I am perfectly surprised...You are cute though!

Yes, Liz...I guess I invented, it's called, just playing around...and I was...I'm glad you liked it.

Mark--You have made me blush with your praise...thank you so much!

jwesley--jeez...then we are in trouble, cause I am serious about playing around.


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6 posted 2000-07-13 11:14 PM


Martie~
Ah .... the ~Martie-nique~ structure ...
Well, I always said your writing was unique.
This just proved me right ! !

This is absolutely lovely, my friend.
~*Marge*~

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7 posted 2000-07-14 11:22 PM


Martie ...

For just playing around, you've put together some great structure in this piece ... Worth going through the board again ... I love little snipets that keep bring one back to the thrust of a piece ... Nice work ...

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