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Open Poetry #8

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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-07-12 08:13 PM

Did I not think clear
Or for that, did you,
Sudden thoughts excused us
To desperate words.
Neither were two souls ready
To company part
To kiss a last goodbye
On lips that turned cold.
Cold from thoughts of loneliness
Of nights holding scrapes of memories
Distant lines that excuse us
And of meanings that we need.
To ponder futures we wish
Those simple pleasures in life
Of days doing chores and work
The nights private times.
Of your children that I feel
To see your peacefull face
Once more to the dance
To take your hands embrace.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-07-12 08:31 PM

Sudden thoughts excused us
To desperate words.
Neither were two souls ready
To company part
To kiss a last goodbye
On lips that turned cold.
Cold from thoughts of loneliness
Of nights holding scrapes of memories
Distant lines that excuse us
And of meanings that we need.
To ponder futures we wish
Those simple pleasures in life
Of days doing chores and work
The nights private times.
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you've got some very cool lines in this...

"Sudden thoughts excused us
To desperate words."

very cool, very unique and poetic
many well defined emotions as well
another excellent poem from you Michael..
better be careful...
someone might think your a poet

later
jm

Adrienne
Junior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 20
California

2 posted 2000-07-12 08:35 PM

Michael,
your expression of goodbye is heartfelt and quite visual, as well.
Nicely written.....

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