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Jan
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0 posted 2000-07-11 11:41 AM


Born shining, luminous
Innocence reflecting light
illuminating all she touches
Offering, tasting, revealing, sight.

She desires but One
with whom she'll share her secret.
Her aura shines brightest
for him who loves her without regret.

She willingly gives her every breath
to feed his flame's desire.
Be not blinded by her beauty's depth
but bask in her radiance.

If so simple God's design
why then tarnish her with words
whose only purpose is to malign
she who would but love you?

As he watches does he not feel shame?
Nor grieve her loss,
her dying flame?
Or does he but celebrate his own?

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Martini
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1 posted 2000-07-11 11:44 AM


Beautiful work....
abosutely beautiful

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2 posted 2000-07-11 02:00 PM


Jan~
I really enjoyed this ....
wonderful writing -

'Her aura shines brightest
for him who loves her without regret.'

~*Marge*~


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Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2000-07-11 02:14 PM


If so simple God's design
why then tarnish her with words
whose only purpose is to malign
she who would but love you?

As he watches does he not feel shame?
Nor grieve her loss,
her dying flame?
Or does he but celebrate his own?

This is truely beautiful and I do hear your cry within this.  Glad I caught this one.

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-07-11 08:58 PM


Born shining, luminous
Innocence reflecting light
illuminating all she touches
Offering, tasting, revealing, sight.

She desires but One
with whom she'll share her secret.
Her aura shines brightest
for him who loves her without regret.

She willingly gives her every breath
to feed his flame's desire.
Be not blinded by her beauty's depth
but bask in her radiance.
-----------------
wow girl...this is awesome writing
this is beautiful in its sensuality and sadness
the emotions are so well expressed...
so glad to see ya back posting
take care
jm

ps..you should submit this for the book
its perfect to reflect your work
and its going in my library too  




I think I could need - this in my life
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

Jan
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5 posted 2000-07-12 08:21 AM


Thank you everyone!  Your messages make my day.
serenity blaze
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6 posted 2000-07-12 08:33 AM


Hi Jan, really nice stuff here...(and I knew Janet Marie would "dig" on this...lol)  as well as I...THANKS.
tracie66
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7 posted 2000-07-12 08:55 AM


Wonderful writings Jan...enjoyed the read thanks  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Jan
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8 posted 2000-07-13 09:01 AM


Serenity and Tracie

Thanks so much!  I appreciate your taking a moment to read my rambling thoughts.

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