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Christopher
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0 posted 2000-07-11 08:17 AM


In Tear-Stained Loss
©2000  Christopher Ward



by indictment
     bitter ache
  cried I
    doubts doleful dirge
       loss
       anger
       love
       loss
  crystaled sprinkling
               -jaded mem’ries
     ca
         sc
            ade

                    crumbled
    a dull reminiscence
           ~brilliance~
      the light of hoping
              once betrayed
    appointed pain
         un-anointed reign
   by jealousy
        of heart-hurt
   scorned
malice wrought
              in ill-fate
     ...judgement
    of moments
        spent
  in un-alone


© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-07-11 08:25 AM


Christopher*
This aches with betrayal and lost love....Your gift of imagery shines in this
and your flair of the "dark" calls~

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2000-07-11 09:45 AM


Geez, Christopher, can you SEE THROUGH THE SCREEN?  "judgement of moment spent in un-alone..."   hmmm...scary...(serenity crosses legs, blushing...)

Thanks for this one this 'morn...enjoyed muchly....

Nicole
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3 posted 2000-07-11 12:52 PM


sigh

crystaled sprinkling
           -jaded mem’ries
     ca
         sc
            ade

                  crumbled
    a dull reminiscence
         ~brilliance~
      the light of hoping
              once betrayed

You write to burst apart the stoniest of hearts, m'friend.  This aches.
wow Chris

BOL
N.

X Angel
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4 posted 2000-07-11 02:12 PM


this was awesome Chris m'friend

~H

Mark Bohannan
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5 posted 2000-07-11 02:21 PM


A true work of art.  I loved the style of this.  Keep 'em coming.  
Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-07-11 04:38 PM


well this leaves one tingling...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


brian madden
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7 posted 2000-07-11 05:39 PM


Chris, this sent a chill down my spine. Fantastic poem.

"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers.

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-07-11 08:18 PM


the title alone is pure poetry
and the poems emotions dressed in that
very cool presentation is poetry in motion.
excellent Chris, truly
later-cascade-gator
jm


I think I could need - this in my life
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2000-07-11 09:04 PM


An emotional offering of a poem, this one with great presentation... such a lovely feel to it... Christopher, this is excellent writing... coming from you, no surprise at all... enjoyed the reading very much

regards, sudhir.

Severn
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10 posted 2000-07-12 06:03 AM


Well now...

you know what I think of cascade...that visuality gets me.

I don't see this as betrayal of love as such...no not at all. Hope is harder than love sometimes.

A breath of a poem, written in a breath, that takes the breath.

Awesome.

  K

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 07-12-2000).]

ESP
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11 posted 2000-07-12 07:00 AM


This is brill, Chris! The visual effect was so good.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 2000-07-12 08:47 AM


I ache for you
Superb poem and presentation from the perfectionist, himself
Liz

tracie66
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13 posted 2000-07-12 08:51 AM


This piece is wonderful in every way Christopher. I do so like your presentation  
Tracie


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


angelswing
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14 posted 2000-07-12 09:43 AM


Great poem, thissaid a lot, and the imagery was great .
L.of.L. Tom .


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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
15 posted 2000-07-12 04:30 PM


Thank you all for your reponses! I was worried I might have been a bit too obtuse with this one!  
Kit McCallum
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16 posted 2000-07-12 09:31 PM


Wonderful format Christopher ... it flowed so beautifully with your sentiments! Truly enjoyed this I did!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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17 posted 2000-07-12 11:54 PM


*Bows before the master of free-form*

This was beautiful, Chris. But then again, I never expect anything less from you.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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