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angelswing
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0 posted 2000-07-11 07:50 AM


                 I wish

                Put me down you wisiwig,
                Go away,
                What I Say Isn’t What I Get,
                I want her love,
                I want her smile,
                I want her warm embrace,
                And yet it won’t go right at all,
                I’ll never unlock her case .
                I get depressed,
                You make it right,
                I feel happy when you’re near,
                When you’re not close to me,
                I shed one lonely tear,
                Then more and more,
                They flow and flow,
                Tears become one from two,
                Is there some mystic reason?
                That says,
                I can’t have you .
                I want one thing,
                It’s all I want,
                And all I need,
                And all I live for to,
                It’s all I ask,
                So please,
                I ask,
                Will you not love me to ?
                I know I should be happy,
                Then why am I so sad?
                Is it cause,
                I understand,
                And realise
                That my life’s bad,
                And in the end it all is wrong,
                I will end up as dust,
                I can not take this vicious,
                Evil life,
                That drives me close to lust .

                Written by Tom Baker .


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Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -




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Martini
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-07-11 11:46 AM



through your writing I can feel all that you fell
good work

crucifix kiss
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since 2000-07-09
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2 posted 2000-07-11 02:04 PM


hi tom , guess who ...


... hahahaha its cabes , got a new name , im gonna try not to let anyone else know for a while so dont tell anyone ok .

well, i was priveleged enough to see this in draft and u saw my reaction (speechless) , u know i love your writing . how is she anyway ? . have u spoken to her since we broke up???.
oh well , id better go , see ya mate

"and as it was with all things, we spoke in rhyme and riddle. Not for fear of detection, for that had happened very long ago, but rather that those wh

crucifix kiss
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3 posted 2000-07-11 02:06 PM


i meant broke up from college by the way , not since me and her broke up cos we didnt go out , k see ya

"and as it was with all things, we spoke in rhyme and riddle. Not for fear of detection, for that had happened very long ago, but rather that those wh

angelswing
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4 posted 2000-07-12 12:19 PM


Thank you both,
Martini - I am glad you understand .
Cabes - Well done mate, i'll keep it quiet, does Debs know about the new name ? I was getting worried for a second there i must admit, I think shes fine although I haven't talked to her much .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-07-12 12:38 PM


Really nice release of your pain.  It shines through quite clearly and I hope for you that it does a 180 real soon.  Enjoyed.
Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
6 posted 2000-07-12 03:43 PM


Hi Tom.....

     It must be human nature to desire what we know we can't have. You've captured this
well, and I love your ability to share yourself.....makes you special......


Life is but a dream...
so sleep easy...



angelswing
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7 posted 2000-07-26 05:43 PM


Mark - Thanks, I am hoping it will, this is the only place I can release the pain, and i'm glad your prepared to listen .
Sunny1 - thank you very much, I wouldn't say the way I share my self is an ability, I just write down what's inside which is quite scary reading what I have wrote afterwards and knowing that i havn't twisted it and it's how I feel, I usualy shield my self from the way I feel - until i read my poetry . I must say you have an exceptionaly positive name and I am glad you can be happy - don't lose the skill . Thanks for saying i'm special, I haven't heard it said for to long and it cheered me up, even if your the only person who does think it and it isn't true .

Thanks both of you .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2000-07-26 06:33 PM


Tom....love is beautiful but it sure is tricky stuff is'nt it.
I could feel the love you want to share in this very nicely done

take care......ethome..

angelswing
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since 2000-02-10
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9 posted 2000-07-27 01:13 PM


Thanks Ethome - unfortunatly to much of my poetry is like that .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

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