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Denise
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0 posted 2000-07-10 09:14 PM


The canvas brushed with life-like hue
Can make me bid today adieu;
I travel back to years long past
To carefree days that went too fast.

Along the shore in fair Cape May
I frolic in the ocean spray
In simpler times of long ago
Those gleeful ones that children know.

I build grand castles made of sand
Enchanted by this magic land
Of crashing waves and briny foam
That chimes a tune that I am home.

The artist brings a world to me
Of innocence and revelry
A masterpiece of days sublime
That I can visit any time.

4/5/2000


I just won third place in a poetry contest. The theme was 'Simpler Times'. The entries had to compare Thomas Kinkade's paintings to 'seaside memories at Cape May (N.J.) I guess third place isn't so bad out of over 300 entries (at least that is what I keep telling myself!) I hope you all like it!

Denise

© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-07-10 09:17 PM


Congratulations!!!!!!
You deserve it, this is wonderful.
Third place is fabulous.


Kathleen

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2 posted 2000-07-10 09:23 PM



Denise, this poem is a masterpiece!  Out of 300 entries, third place is amazing, congratulations, you should be very proud, as we are of you.  But, in my books, you'll always be number one!  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


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3 posted 2000-07-10 09:41 PM


Denise~
That's just WONDERFUL !
And why would a MASTERPIECE not be an
entry in OUR BOOK ???
You've got some answering to do here !
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 2000-07-10 09:52 PM


Thank you, Kathleen, Melissa and Marge for reading and for your wonderful comments! You are so kind!  

Marge, thanks for the compliment. I submitted two for voting for the book, the ones I wrote for my grandchildren. I didn't want to water down my 'automatic votes' by submitting more than that. If I can just get those in the book, or even one of them, I'd be tickeled pink. Thanks again, Love ya!

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5 posted 2000-07-10 09:56 PM


Well, Denise, I don't really feel this poem should have been awarded third place. It should have won hands down!!! Wonderful writing, Denise. I'm very proud of you and glad that you're getting recognition that you deserve  
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6 posted 2000-07-10 10:44 PM


Denise--How wonderful!!  Your poem is a winner...very beautifully done!
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7 posted 2000-07-10 10:50 PM


THIRD???????? Let me at them!!!! This is
First Class Beautiful Denise~

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8 posted 2000-07-10 10:59 PM


Thank you, Balladeer, Martie and Butterflies for your lovely replies! You all make me feel like a First Place winner!  

Denise

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9 posted 2000-07-10 11:06 PM


Third ? .... Third !!!
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
You want me to go 'Bite em'?
... Ruff ...


Ruff Bow Wow
Grrrrrrrrrrr

Denise
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10 posted 2000-07-10 11:37 PM


ROFL   Thanks for the offer bad little dog!

Denise

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11 posted 2000-07-11 05:45 PM


This is very beautiful Denise and I know that it would be good enough to win any contest!!

Nathan

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12 posted 2000-07-11 06:00 PM


Denise - Congratulations on winning third place out of so many entries.  Even more significant (I think) is that you found the courage to say, "I'm good enough to win, and I'm not ashamed to show it!"  That takes real courage and faith in yourself.  What a wonderful character trait you have shown us all.  Forget the watering down worries - I think you should post this poem for our book.  At least then the rest of us can claim that we were published with Denise Snyder's prize winning work from Cape May.
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13 posted 2000-07-11 06:28 PM


Denise, sometimes such titles can be misleading. not in this case. A truely wonderful poem and what an image you paint.
Congrads on your win.

"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers.

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14 posted 2000-07-11 07:49 PM


d,
As you are one of my most staunch supporters ,I feel that you have been dealt a grievous wrong here . I will most definitely hunt these offenders down and make them see the errors of their ways .It should be relatively easy to tell if I have done my job , just look for the hoof marks !
Doc

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15 posted 2000-07-11 08:13 PM


I build grand castles made of sand
Enchanted by this magic land
Of crashing waves and briny foam
That chimes a tune that I am home.

The artist brings a world to me
Of innocence and revelry
A masterpiece of days sublime
That I can visit any time.
----------------

Denise... this is so lovely...
such a graceful work of words...
exceptional imagery...
i think its wonderful that you won out over so many..
i would say thats quite an honor...
but contest or not...
this is an excellent poem...
besides, your 1st place in our hearts  
jm


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If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

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16 posted 2000-07-11 08:55 PM


Thank you, Nate, Mike, Brian, Dr. Moose, and Janet Marie for reading and for your wonderful replies! They are priceless to me and worth more to me than even first place!  

Denise

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17 posted 2000-07-11 08:59 PM


The artist brings a world to me
Of innocence and revelry
A masterpiece of days sublime
That I can visit any time.

....

Definitely a Masterpiece,
for me this is a sure-shot no. 1....

great work and many congratulations, Denise...

Regards,
Sudhir

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18 posted 2000-07-12 08:43 AM


I have to say that I would have handed you the blue ribbon.  I am a huge fan of Thomas Kinkade and even have 5 of his paintings in my house and your verse is just as beautiful to rest my eyes on.
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19 posted 2000-07-12 08:51 AM


Denise! Congratulations!
That is a wonderful honor!
And I loved the poem!
I'm so proud of you!
Love Liz

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20 posted 2000-07-12 09:39 AM


Congrats, I think you deserved first, but then again I didn't see the others, they must have been good, This poem reads so well and you have described the image so well .
L.of.L. Tom .


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21 posted 2000-07-12 09:44 AM


The mark of great poetry ... Vistas in the mind from very few words ... Congrats from a newcomer ...
Denise
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22 posted 2000-07-13 09:17 PM


Thank you Sudhir, Mark (I'll soon have one of his prints, too, as soon as I go back down to Cape May to pick up my prize! He's my favorite artist!), Elizabeth, Tom and MA for reading and for such lovely replies.  

Denise

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23 posted 2000-07-13 10:39 PM


The prize is in the wonderful feeling this elicits Denise ... happy, childhood memories we can all relate to and appreciate, thank you for the lovely thoughts!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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24 posted 2000-07-15 07:30 PM


Thank you for reading and for your lovely reply, Kit! I'm glad that you can relate to this! They were the best of times, weren't they?!  

Denise

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25 posted 2000-07-15 11:10 PM


Never mind, Denise about not winning...this is a first-rate poem and what's most important is your confidence and pride in your work...right
Denise
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26 posted 2000-07-16 06:02 PM


Thanks, Kaile! That's so sweet!  

Denise

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27 posted 2000-07-16 06:13 PM


Thats GGGrrrreat Denise

Congrats to you on your winnings.
You deserve it. Cause if anyone thats read your work, I'm sure they would agree.

Bravo...Applause!

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28 posted 2000-07-16 06:23 PM


Congrats to you. I can see why you did so well. The poem is as solid as any and perfectly timed and rhymed. Full of great reflections...Bravo!!
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29 posted 2000-07-16 08:36 PM


Thank you, Ethome, for reading and for your gracious reply!

Denise

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30 posted 2000-07-17 12:15 PM


Congratulations Denise!  Wonderful read, I don't know the artist but you made a beautiful picture with your words and brought me back to happy and peaceful memories of days gone by. I give you first place!



Denise
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31 posted 2000-07-17 07:55 PM


Thank you, Impassionata, for reading and for your lovely reply! And welcome to Passions!  

Denise

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32 posted 2000-07-23 07:35 PM


Denise that's awesome! I don't know how I managed to miss this poem, but I did.   So here's another *bump* up to the top.  

Elizabeth


Why ME???

Denise
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33 posted 2000-07-23 10:29 PM


Thanks, Elizabeth, I'm glad you enjoyed it!  

Denise

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AND ... I KNOW a WINNER when I read one~

This is just so very, very lovely, my friend~

****Playing in the archives ...
having a Denise day~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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