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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

0 posted 2000-07-10 05:28 PM


Shimmering Pools

Shimmering pools of silver moonlight
Grazing upon the tears I have shed
Resting gently next to the eyes of the night
Smiling for the heart upon which you have tread

Once pulsing with the breath of love
Now gasping in the abandoned trust
Resonating darkness from the heavens above
Quenching my thirst from love's hidden dust

Reflections of promise for a sugared tomorrow
Swirling softly in a pool of my tears
Puddled masses of my deepest sorrow
Caressing tenderly all my heightened fears

Shimmering pools of moonbean's grace
Dancing upon memories of your trampled path
Guiding me through the torment I now face
As I weep defeated in your lover's wrath

Mark Bohannan

© Copyright 2000 Mark Bohannan - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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1 posted 2000-07-10 05:33 PM


Mark this is EXCELLENT writing here
your ache raises of the page...
and the emotions are felt as each
verse builds up the pain...
the imagery you weaved in is a beautiful
accent to those sad emotions
very emotionally strong piece
so sorry for the hearbreak it descibes tho.
take care
jm

I think I could need - this in my life
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-07-10 05:35 PM


Im back...did ya miss me   lol
i forgot to say...
the rhyme is perfect...
made the poem complete
ok im done worshiping ...for now *smile*
bye
jm

I think I could need - this in my life
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-07-10 05:50 PM


jm, where did you go? Please come back I miss you so!!  Oh there you are.  You had me thinking you just walked away.  Thanks for the lovely words of praise and as always it is I who worship your sweet replies you send my way.  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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Michigan
4 posted 2000-07-10 06:14 PM


Mark*
This is magnificent writing.....the part of
your heart you wrote this with shows...the
images are dripping with beauty and pain.
Thank you so much for sharing this~


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-07-10 06:58 PM


Bdc--once again you leave me blushing with your kind words.   Thank you for them and for your kind heart.
Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-07-10 08:37 PM


Mark,

This was wonderful writing.  I can feel the sadness yet I see the most lovely images.  Great job.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Paula Finn
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missouri
7 posted 2000-07-10 09:44 PM


you make me cry...i want to take your pain away...
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
8 posted 2000-07-10 09:48 PM


Mark,
Good thoughts, good words, good writing.

Denise
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9 posted 2000-07-10 10:47 PM


Now how did you make 'sad' sound so 'beautiful'? Excellent writing, Mark!  

Denise

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2000-07-11 12:08 PM


LW-thank you so much

Paula- ahh don't cry

Seymour-thank you for the kind words

Denise-glad you liked it and found the beauty in it.  Thank you for reading and responding.

Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
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Wyoming
11 posted 2000-07-11 12:11 PM


Wow Mark, this is quite a beauty.   Enjoyed it very much.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
12 posted 2000-07-11 06:19 AM


Eloise- thank you so much  
Beth
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13 posted 2000-07-11 07:21 AM



~Ah, this is true poetry...wonderfull..I loved this as I do all your work...keep it up..I love the reading~

Blessed Be,
Beth

angelswing
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since 2000-02-10
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United Kingdom
14 posted 2000-07-11 07:29 AM


Super, sweet, sensational, supream stanza, Very nice, deep and expressive with emotions over flowing, I loved it and enjoyed it, I do believe you have just entered into the realm that torments me, the realm that we call depression .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
15 posted 2000-07-11 08:35 AM


Mark!  You Devil!  Making all these ladies swoon and step forward to mend your trampled heart... *Psst, Mark.  Long John here.  I'm writing in italics so the ladies can't read my secret message to you.  What a neat ploy that poem was!  Just leave your home address lying around, and they'll all be coming over with dinner dishes and bowls of chicken noodle soup and cakes and pies and ....  Ohhh, you are a sly one*
Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
16 posted 2000-07-11 08:47 AM


Ahhh, a touching one ...

MARK this is a reMARKable poem (disregard the pun though) and

accept my regards,
sudhir.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
17 posted 2000-07-11 10:33 AM


Beth-As I do yours.  Thank you muchly.

Angelswing-glad you like it and I truely hope that you leave the realm of depression very soon.  Someone has to, it is becoming too crowded.

LngJhnAg-what can I say-you found me out.  Just don't tell the ladies though, I am hungrey and need all those plates. LOL. The italics don't work though because I believe they all have decoders.

Sudhir-Thank you and the pun was ignored(not)
thanks for reading.  

Martini
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since 2000-07-11
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Toronto, Ontario, Canada
18 posted 2000-07-11 11:39 AM


Absolutely beautiful

While reading this poem it brought tears to my eyes. You expressed exactly how I feel at this time in my life...

Amazing work

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
19 posted 2000-07-11 11:43 AM


Martini-thank you for the reply.  I am glad it touched you and I hope that "new" path is one filled with love and joy.
ma miller
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20 posted 2000-07-11 12:12 PM


I like your style, Mark ... I'm new to this site and I like it more than most I've been to already ... Thanks.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
21 posted 2000-07-11 12:15 PM


Ma Miller-welcome to Passions.  I know you will enjoy it here as do I.  Looking forward to reading many of your creations.  Thanks for the kind reply.
Paula Finn
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missouri
22 posted 2000-07-16 01:08 PM


I know what this one means to you so I came back to read it again

never say never

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
23 posted 2000-07-16 01:16 PM


Great way to tie in the lost romance by using the wonderful line "shimmering pools of moonlight." I thought that was an excellent way to emphasize the sadness of the heartbreak. Good job Mark!
Trew
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Ottawa, Canada
24 posted 2000-07-16 01:26 PM


Seem to have missed this one on the first go 'round.  Glad I was able to catch it this time.  It's a beauty!
You really conveyed that sense of dread and sorrow well; a little too well.  I still have the feeling of uneasiness in me.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
25 posted 2000-07-17 01:05 AM


Paula- Thank you.  It does mean alot to me.

Ethome-That you could use the word excellent is a true compliment and I thank you for that.

Trew-Thank you so much and I hope the uneasiness has left you by now.  


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26 posted 2000-07-17 02:14 AM


MarkB~
Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~


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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
27 posted 2000-07-17 02:34 AM


Marge- Thank you dear friend
tracie66
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28 posted 2000-07-17 03:36 AM


Mark~
what sorrow abounds in this
heartache felt
HUGS
Tracie~
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Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
29 posted 2000-07-17 06:48 AM


Tracie-There is and I thank you for reading and replying.  Thanks for the hugs.
Paula Finn
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missouri
30 posted 2000-07-26 02:58 AM


This one is just so beautiful I had to come read it again

never say never

linda munday
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31 posted 2000-07-26 03:15 AM


A heart tugger with exceptional rhyme and flow.
Beautifully done Mark.

Linda M.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
32 posted 2000-07-26 08:19 AM


Linda-thank you so much.  You must have done quite a bit of digging to pull this one up.LOL
Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
33 posted 2000-07-26 08:41 AM


Mark, This is excellent
Emotion so eloquently spoken
And so poetically spoken
Beautiful images for the sorrow felt
Liz

Dee
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34 posted 2001-08-15 11:32 PM


A day for quiet reading and I find such a beauty as this.
Lovely ache you have here Mark.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

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