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Yesterdays Dreams |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
In the silence that is my heart I call your name, hearing only lonely echoes bounce back from the ruins of a broken dream. Promises given in the flush of first love, fall by the wayside when passion dies and hope flees the shadows. Whispers of the beginning still whimper in my mind, begging for release and the chance to grow again untouched by this pain. And the heart that just yesterday laughed now lies empty and bleeding crushed by the betrayal of yesterdays dreams. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wow, you have some very powerful descriptions here. That first verse is very good. Keep it up! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula* This is fantastic work!!!! Very sad and very much from the depths of a broken heart. Your imagery is very powerful.... Whispers of the beginning still whimper in my mind, begging for release and the chance to grow again untouched by this pain. WOW.........awesome work! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In the silence that is my heart I call your name, hearing only lonely echoes ------------------- Whispers of the beginning still whimper in my mind, begging for release and the chance to grow again untouched by this pain. And the heart that just yesterday laughed now lies empty and bleeding crushed by the betrayal of yesterdays dreams. ------------- Paula this just aches up off the page... powerful expressions, very well written things can change in the blink of an eye... all we can hope for is to know why take care jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Elizabeth...thank you... Butterflies...Thanks...the heart is healing thanks to a special man JM...the blink of an eye...for me it was the answering of a reply...the heart is healing |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Only a broken heart could write a powerful poem such as this. You have a way with words in this piece, your despair and anger and hopelessness leap from the screen and cries out, making the reader feel it with you, cleverly written I might add. I am glad that your heart is finally healing. Hugs to you, my friend  Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Paula..... I loved this one as much as all the others you've done. What can I say.....your style is very impressive, and you always paint a picture with your thoughts...... ~~~guess I'm a fan~~~ Hold life with an open hand....leaving it room to grow.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I know you know. Well written. MHBFY!!! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
They just keep coming ... So much talent here ... This was sad and beautiful at the same time ... Thanks. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Melissa...as always your words are generous and your friendship overwhelming...thank you. Sunny1...thanks...a fan huh? A friend too I hope...I'm glad you enjoyed this. Mark...I do love...thank you...AMFY!!!!!! MA Miller...I dont know abt talent just lots of emotions pounding on the heart demanding release....but thanks I have been reading you too. |
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