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i can see insanity from here
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i can see insanity from here |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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sometimes my life is so out of control that it is like doing three sixties on an ice blacked highway where excitement reigns a split second kingdom before being overthrown by panic and succeeded by fear... but there i will stop for a moment as you are probably scrunching your eyebrows with disbelief and asking just how would this writer know that? but i do. because i did just that one cold dark night. and so now when my thoughts take over the wheel and the spinning starts and reasoning says turn turn i say turn into the slide you are losing control and fear and i grip white knucked at anything at nothing at all and each time around the too fast approaching headlights of the Road Closed ahead truck get closer and the eyes frozen in fear behind the wheel and i are one as we wait for the impending crash and burn the best i can tell you is don't stand too near because i might not be there yet but i can certainly see insanity from here |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
karon- this is AWESOME! quoted my favorite lines below but really there are too many too quote... you said it all here... yep.... so... get the new job done.... much LOVE -d "turn i say turn into the slide you are losing control and fear and i grip white knucked at anything at nothing at all" "and each time around the too fast approaching headlights of the Road Closed ahead truck get closer and the eyes frozen in fear behind the wheel and i are one as we wait for the impending crash and burn " "don't stand too near because i might not be there yet but i can certainly see insanity from here" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
that road does go very near there great poem Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I was afraid to click on this when I saw the title... I just knew you were looking in my direction  awesome poem girl...very cool ... same lines as Doreen said... superb later-corvette gator jm |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this a lot...James |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Insanity has many faces, and I think you've captured one of them beautifully!! Paint your words upon the eager waiting canvas of my heart.....~Sunny1~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh, what a flow of expressions.... I am bewildered... great work, Corazon, great work... sometimes my life is so out of control that it is like doing three sixties on an ice blacked highway where excitement reigns a split second kingdom before being overthrown by panic and succeeded by fear... .. .. the best i can tell you is don't stand too near because i might not be there yet but i can certainly see insanity from here ... what wonderful lines, very much enjoyed... regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved this Corazon! Had to read it twice, I did! Oh, I can relate much too much to these words. Great poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, i am technically "offline" for the next 2 weeks, so don't have time to thank each one personally....but you know my heart does  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corazon--great job with traveling this highway with a poem. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
karon, please submit this for Voices! Had to come back and read it again... it's a really fine piece of work. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yep, AWESOME, that's the word! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The title alone is worth the price of admission but the poem far exceeds that. This is better than any adjective I can muster up. How about following it up with "On a Clear Day You Can See Hysteria?" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
You caught my attention with this one, very good. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all....really glad my insanity makes you smile lol....no really i appreciate all the comments.... and lol@on a clear day might just do that...i have been to hyteria many times |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I think you are looking out my window or I'm looking over your shoulder....back seat driver This is fantastic work~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I do believe that we are just aroud the corner from each other. Maybe I will see you there. Enjoyed this alot. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karon - I love this analogy - you brought all the frenzy and emotions of impending loss of control right to me - this is a great read - frantic, yet driven; whirling, yet focused; wonderful, yet better than that! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Love the visual play of your words ... Forces one to read as you wrote ... thanks |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, really appreciate your comments |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Ahh but if we don't stand to close, you'll probably crash a lot quicker therefore it's your friends juty to stand by you, And you never know, you may come out the other side with just a few miner scratches on the paint work, nothing that a good engineer can't sort out . I really enjoyed this poem as I sit on the knife blade to, one slip and I'm gone . L.of.L. Tom . P.s. I hope you got the full extent of the metaphor as it was a little subtle . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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