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Poetias
Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 26


0 posted 2000-07-07 04:20 PM


...One more before the weekend.


You are here and I am still lonely.
It seems that with each day passing,
the depth of my solitude grows greater.
How have I wronged you my love?
What great sin have I committed that would drive you to the distance at which your heart now resides.
I will repent my transgressions to you
Let me suffer and be cleansed.
Show me where the path to we diverged into the wood
I will find my way back to you
this is my solemn vow.
Our happiness burned bright, and it guided me through my travels
but it is getting dark now and I can't see well
I'm fighting the feeling that our beacon will soon burn out
and all will fade
to black.


"Even as love crowns you, so shall he crucify you. But if in your fear you would seek only love's pleasure then it is better for you to cover your nak

© Copyright 2000 Nira C Jones - All Rights Reserved
redheart angrybraids
Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii
1 posted 2000-07-08 01:35 AM


a constant call of my heart.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

MysticalNights
Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 112
Oklahoma
2 posted 2000-07-08 01:39 AM


Very touching piece..  Enjoyed the read..

A Dream is a Wish the Heart Makes...

Poetias
Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 26

3 posted 2000-07-09 08:26 AM


Redheart..I'm glad. I write only what speaks to the heart. Thank you for answering.

Mystical...Thank you for reading. With people enjoying my reads, it can only get better. I hope

Thanx


"Even as love crowns you, so shall he crucify you." -Khalil Gibran
THE PROPHET

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-07-09 08:29 AM


This is very nice work...and welcome to Passions btw!

K

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
5 posted 2000-07-09 09:24 AM


I loved this piece!!!!!!

It captured a feeling of desperation and I guess a sort of helplessness at trying to hold onto someone, and not knowing how.

Very well-put, my friend...........


Paint your words upon the eager waiting canvas of my heart.....~Sunny1~

Poetias
Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 26

6 posted 2000-07-09 10:06 AM


Severn...Thank you for the welcome. I am glad I have been "accepted" into this poets society. I will try to make my stay here some sort of contribution.

Sunny1...The desperation is more than I could ever organize into poetry. But that doesn't mean I can't try. Thank you for showing that my message has gotten across.

Poetias


"Even as love crowns you, so shall he crucify you." -Khalil Gibran
THE PROPHET

Cuddlez
Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
7 posted 2000-07-14 01:10 AM


But even as it fades, remember you have a memory of that light... And more life to live to find and make even more flames/connections....

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

Poetias
Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 26

8 posted 2000-07-14 07:47 AM


So true. So true. It seems now as if my flame is being re lit. Little by little sparks every day bring the promise of that same beacon that lighted my path.

Thank you for taking the time to read.



"Even as love crowns you, so shall he crucify you." -Khalil Gibran
THE PROPHET

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