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0 posted 2000-07-07 01:27 PM


The Beginning, Chapter I [Inspired by Sven]

It was there, on another plane
      in another life
         in someone else’s dream
               somewhere amid star shine and moon’s beam

loved a life anew
loved another, too
there, on the other plane

Memories trickle in
     between night dream and reality
        where there lies the line
             black/white, lust/love
                  so close, so far
                         there, on another plane

lived another life anew
loved others too
there, on that other plane

               Seafoam memories

               red-orange china memories

               fling me far away to sea

                             there, on the other plane

Perhaps an ancient bird was I
      as in dream state I often fly,
             under power of my own
                    there, on the other plane

Is it just a wanton dream,
     of people/beings I only want to be
          or is it something I should see
                there, on the other plane…


27 June 2000
©Karilea Rilling Jungel




Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-07-07 01:31 PM


Oh Sunshine ... such a mystical and magical feel transcending to other worldly planes ... ENCORE!!!  (I'll watch for Chapter 2 ... loved this)

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2000-07-07 01:40 PM


Beautiful and mystical indeed.  I will anxiously be waiting to read the other chapters.  Wonderful read to enter into the afternoon with.
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3 posted 2000-07-07 01:49 PM


Kit, Mark, you two are quick! Chapter II is posted...

and thanks!

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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4 posted 2000-07-07 02:03 PM


  On to #II I go!


Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

X Angel
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5 posted 2000-07-07 02:07 PM


I've been enjoying this thread in Feelings muchly. Great poem girl! Now on to the others for me too...
(this poem gave me shivers btw...maybe it's too close to home??)
~H

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6 posted 2000-07-07 02:10 PM


JP, enjoy...

XA - perhaps the shivers are because...you are...my twin?...

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7 posted 2000-07-07 05:40 PM


Sunshine - This is incredible, can't wait to read the next two.....Bonnie
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8 posted 2000-07-07 05:51 PM


Bonnie, thanks...enjoy...
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9 posted 2000-07-08 09:07 AM


Perhaps an ancient bird was I
      as in dream state I often fly,
             under power of my own
                    there, on the other plane

Is it just a wanton dream,
     of people/beings I only want to be
          or is it something I should see
                there, on the other plane…


what adream, on to read the rest, oh I can't wait to see where this magical trip will take me.

"Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison

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10 posted 2000-07-08 09:10 AM


Brian, I sincerely hope you will enjoy...
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11 posted 2000-07-08 11:23 AM


Superb Sunny!!

A wonderful work. . . to see that you have traveled far to get where you are now is something that doesn't come to most people easily. . .

To travel to those other planes of existance. . . do we know that they exist?  We don't, for sure, but what if they do??  

And now, on to Part II!!

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



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12 posted 2000-07-08 11:25 AM


Sven, I owe this to you...thank you for the inspiration and for pulling out what has always laid silent...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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13 posted 2000-07-08 11:32 AM


Karilea,
This written sunshine warms me all over. *L*

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SY, thank you SO much...knowing you are reading this brightens my day...
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15 posted 2000-07-08 01:49 PM


Karilea~

In touch with yourself ....

'Perhaps an ancient bird was I
      as in dream state I often fly,
             under power of my own
                    there, on the other plane'

Love the flow of your recall.
~*Marge*~


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16 posted 2000-07-08 01:55 PM


Thank you Marge, hope you enjoy II and III as well...
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17 posted 2000-07-08 01:56 PM


It was there, on another plane
      in another life
         in someone else’s dream
               somewhere amid star shine and moon’s beam
..
..
..
Perhaps an ancient bird was I
      as in dream state I often fly,
             under power of my own
                    there, on the other plane

...........
Karilea,

A day or two away and here you are with a book full of poems.... I am inspired to read them all, and guess this is the first I started with, and a wonderful choice too...

Kudos to me... ha ha  

Many More Kudos to you for writing such an extraordinary work.... WOW

regards, sudhir

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18 posted 2000-07-08 02:08 PM


Sudhir, my friend, I hoped you would come in...welcome home...I hope the trilogy meets with your standards...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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