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Honeybee
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0 posted 2000-07-06 08:47 PM




~SORROW SONG SENRYU~


5-7-5


Sorrow in my heart
intensely flows from my eyes
blurring tomorrow

*By Melissa Honeybee*


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

© Copyright 2000 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-07-06 10:12 PM



These are such little gems from you...I am
much to wordy to ever evoke such feeling from
so little, I envy this gift you have but am
thankful that you share  

Jamie
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2 posted 2000-07-06 11:54 PM


Focus on the past
allows the flow of sorrow
flooding of today

very nice MH!

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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3 posted 2000-07-07 01:43 AM


Such deep sorrow evoked from such few words my friend...what a talent you have.    

*Krista Knutson*

"We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~

Honeybee
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4 posted 2000-07-07 08:06 AM



Thank you for the kind replies  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

kaile
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5 posted 2000-07-07 11:08 AM


another winner...like the last line muchly...the few simple words show how apprehensive and depressed she is about the future NICE!

Sorrow Song Senyru
Past inhibitions
Imprisons bashful mind deep
Only sad song heard

Honeybee
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6 posted 2000-07-07 07:19 PM



Thank you kaile, and your senryu was well written, thanks for sharing  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

brian madden
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7 posted 2000-07-07 07:23 PM


Melissa short but not so sweet, another well crafted piece. I hope every thing is well.  


A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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8 posted 2000-07-07 11:54 PM


Another gem, Melissa. Keep them coming!

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



Honeybee
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9 posted 2000-07-08 05:58 PM



Thank you Brian and Elizabeth I enjoy writing haikus and senryus, and I try to make them personal if I can  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

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