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OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20
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Pearl city Iowa

0 posted 2000-07-06 04:02 PM


This is an experiment in trying to marry music with verse, I dont know wether it works, but if you take the first letter of every word you can play "Twinkle, twinkle little star".

Stars

Glittering, ghostly diamonds dance,
Engulfing every dream,
Crystaline cut beauty,
By astral angels gleam,
Dappled darkling cresents,
Caught by brilliance abound,
Distant dim coronas cluster,
Binding black around,
Galactic gems defiant,
Daze each ebony divide,
China cusp beclouded,
By albeados algid glide.

Olias


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1 posted 2000-07-06 04:30 PM


Olias~
What a clever little piece.

It not only 'works' ...
It ROCKS !
~*Marge*~



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OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
2 posted 2000-07-06 06:41 PM


Thanks Marge, I think it was good for me to use the discipline of only allowing myself seven letters because there is no "F" in the song in this key. I'm enjoying setting myself these little problems it helps me grow.

Regards
Olias

Holly
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 127
Arkansas
3 posted 2000-07-06 07:18 PM


I like this! It's a great little experiment!! Great job!  
love & all,
-Holly


I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of.
Michel de Montaigne


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