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Blondie
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since 1999-08-06
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0 posted 2000-07-06 12:48 PM




"Dead Soul"

Losing touch with reality,
going quite insane.
No more strict morality,
running thru my brain.

Rejected,ignored,tormented,
all of these i hate
sorry soul demented
no room to communicate

Hanging on a limb,
careful not to fall
the light is so dim
am i worth it all?

Disgusted yet amused,
inside this frightened head,
the light has now diffused
my escape is to be dead.

© Copyright 2000 Melissa - All Rights Reserved
Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
1 posted 2000-07-06 01:24 PM


yah ... that would do it
or you could wait to see what wind-bourn seed could settle in
with patience and the right amount of fertilizer even a dead soul can grow to be the envy of any gardener
Your poem is very nicely done

Rex

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
2 posted 2000-07-06 02:32 PM


this is pretty grim, lil Blondie - Perhaps letting go of all those other things would be a better path?  If you can touch others with your writing, why not reflect for aminute that you do have worth...  Here I go again, transferring the poem onto the author - just call me "Long John in Deep Waters" - lol
Cutie Putootie
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since 2000-01-20
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3 posted 2000-07-06 03:43 PM


Blondie, oh Blondie, what am I going to do with you?  
Hun, I heard about your aunt passing away and I heard on the news about your mother's car accident but don't worry hun, things will get better!  Keep that chin up, I'm sure your mom will recover and I pray for you and your family everyday.
Love,
Kim

Blondie
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since 1999-08-06
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4 posted 2000-07-06 03:44 PM


   Thanks Kim...rough time here.

[This message has been edited by Blondie (edited 07-06-2000).]

Katrina Katrina
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5 posted 2000-07-06 11:27 PM


This is a very sad poem Blondie
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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6 posted 2000-07-07 05:07 PM


Looks like you have lots of stress coming your way right now...I found the best way to deal with it is to face up to the truth.  If we avoid it the fear and anxiety take over in our minds.  If we deal with what is happening right now in this moment we find that we do have the strength to make it thru...and we go on because we have to...we don't want to stay in a place of hurt or unhappiness for to long or it will torment us...Take care...James
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