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Leigh Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 48
Scottsboro, AL USA

0 posted 2000-07-04 03:43 AM


This is unfinished currently....

Electric Soul

Papers fall from my desk,
My desk teeters on the edge of the cosmos,
and I commit each word to fire.

I Burn!  For you I burn!
All night I write in suns across the page
I fuel the busy, the body, that from
your touch, is now the body electric,
with midnight oil.
I write with neon enthusiasm across the air.




Leigh Anne~~~
To be a mother is to accept your heart will forever walk outside your own body!"



© Copyright 2000 Leigh Anne - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-07-04 05:30 PM


ooh I like this....
I love sensual, sultry poetry..
this one is great...sparks..
let me know when you finsh it...
like the imagery of the cosmos and fire
scorch that keyboard!!
great writing
jm

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~LaoTzeTao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Leigh Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 48
Scottsboro, AL USA
2 posted 2000-07-04 05:48 PM


Thank you my dear!  Your praise is much appreciated although this is one of my least favorite poems thus far....

Leigh Anne~~~
To be a mother is to accept your heart will forever walk outside your own body!"



brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
3 posted 2000-07-04 05:55 PM


Leigh, look forward to the rest of this poem. Great so far. really enjoyed it.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2000-07-04 11:04 PM


Excellent. . .

I love the idea of falling from that point into a fire. . .

Can't wait to see it finished. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



LittleCookie
Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 55
asheville,NC,UnitedStates
5 posted 2000-07-04 11:44 PM


I just love how this is wrote! You set the words on fire...Great!
                 ~~LittleCookie~~


:*)Agile in love,while rooted in soul

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