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I am tonight
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I am tonight |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
I am tonight Silver bullets taste like fish, as I rest my thoughts tonight. Chilled by the gentle angels, Please take me away tonight. Trapped by this key I've swallowed help me find my heart tonight. Digging into your ivory wings, I dare myself to escape tonight. The errors of sorrow breathe, will I die in words tonight. Sheets of black, scrumpled to blue I am alone, I am tonight. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Daniel~ Wow! this is excellent,  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
lots of colors, lots of feeling jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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LittleCookie Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 55asheville,NC,UnitedStates |
How lonely this made me feel, written very well! ~~Little Cookie~~ :*)Agile in love,while rooted in soul |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Digging into your ivory wings, I dare myself to escape tonight. The errors of sorrow breathe, will I die in words tonight. Sheets of black, scrumpled to blue I am alone, I am tonight. ----------------- excellent writing... perfection of imagery amazing depth of emotion intense read. take care, jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
great poem...i felt this....it reminded me of an old romance classic from the 50's or 60's.....Loved it!!!  Julie :) |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
Thnk-you all for your comments, they are muchly appreciated. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
the images were stunning the double line format effective, the word "tonight" at he end of the second line gave pattern. Obviously a struggle going on within one person through the entire piece. Very, very well written. Kathleen |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
OOH!! Good one my friend! I enjoyed muchly |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
Again thnk-you all for your encouragement. |
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