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parting is such sweet sorrow ...
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parting is such sweet sorrow ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I can see by the way that you (cant) look at me ... its come to the time where your words will make me cry. So I'll spare you (and me) having to say the words, I already know ... I see that good-bye look in your eyes. So save your breath my love ... you see I've heard it all before. I will spare you all my tears, I'll make it easy for you to walk on out that door ... Good-bye to you ... good-bye to me. Good-bye to fate ... adieu to destiny. Good-bye to promise, good-bye to anticipation ... Good-bye to contentment, God how l'll miss you inspiration. Good-bye to dreams, good-bye to tomorrow ... Good-bye to hope, welcome back old friends, pain and sorrow. Good-bye to innocence, good-bye to all that made me whole ... Good-bye to love, good-bye heart ... good-bye soul. Janet Marie *just playin around with rhymes ... waiting for me muse to return full time*  (dang me moody muse)  What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ for just playing you do damn fine! This is one to pull the heart strings.....  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Your moody muse seems to be doing just fine Janet Marie! I enjoyed this ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JM--*HUGS*--ME 2 |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
JAn, your muse is seems to be co-operating just fine, really enjoyed the poem. Another great poem. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your muse as moody as it may be seems to be working overtime. Another well done work for you to be proud. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Janet, Wonderful poetry here for not having your muse. Cerenity |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I have to agree with the other comments here Janet, looks fine to me. "Good-bye to fate ... adieu to destiny." I have some theories about fate and destiny. I'll have to tell you about them at some stage. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
for one whose muse is moody and sulking, well this is a credible attempt....i can only sit and anticipate the sheer beauty of your poetry when your muse returns big time... waiting |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
That goodbye look is unmistakeable for sure. Very nicely done, JM |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks guys...Im just trying to work thru this much latest bout of writers block... me muse is on summer break I guess. even when its not even close to my best work you guys make me feel like it is. thanks so much... and Kaile...Im waiting too...with bells on LOLtake care all love ya jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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