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Expecting Oceans
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Expecting Oceans |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Travelling Sunday morn Closer to heaven Your beloved hills, South fork of the Carson Rushing hope in its course, Our world glistening, Sierra snow cap melting In your emerald eyes Merging with this stream. Senses are heightened Taking mental movies Time for once tranquil Gingerly on sharp rocks Flashes of hand, face and Thigh so close as to Blur lines between us. My mind expects oceans But I’ll take mountains, rivers with you On any Sunday. © 2000 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Splendid Writing from you Corinne, What imagery!!! and then these lines "My mind expects oceans But I’ll take mountains" Excellent poem... regards, sudhir |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
will have to ditto sudhir on this one, splendid imagery....and yep the ending is superb  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne--when you are heart filled, anywhere is a beautiful Sunday...wonderful poem! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I bow to your talent to paint such imagery with your words. I am in awe. Well done.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In your emerald eyes Merging with this stream. Senses are heightened Taking mental movies Time for once tranquil Gingerly on sharp rocks Flashes of hand, face and Thigh so close as to Blur lines between us. My mind expects oceans But I’ll take mountains, rivers with you On any Sunday. ------------------- well ya sure got my boat to float  excellent C, love the anticipation in this ... "Thigh so close as to Blur lines between us." NOW this is my kind of imagery  very nice read...VERY jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you very much, Corazon, Sudhir, Martie, Mark and Janet Marie, I really appreciate your kind comments. Just had someone send me a nasty email telling me I'm no poet, so it's nice to come here where I know my friends are. Coirnne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, Don't even lend an ear to nasty e-mails like that... We all know that your poetry is excellent... There will always be vile and disgustful people in this world, who out of envy, false ego etc... try to hurt another person just by trying to be a 'smart-alec' and pass snidy comments... So cheer up, we are all here as friends... Take Care, Sudhir |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Corinne~ it seems as though we could live close to each other, I'm in the Sierra foothills~ are you in Nevada? This is a beautiful poem, I know these sentiments very well. -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Corinne, Sudhir said it right. You are much appreciated here and I for one find peace and inspiration in your words and am forever thankful for "Passions" and the wonderful talent such as yours I am able to read and dwell upon. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, SEA, Sudhir and Mark, your words have cheered me up, more than you know. Yours, Corinne |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Oops, forgot to respond to you, SEA, yes I'm in the Sierra foothills of California, but on the California side, near Placerville. Corinne |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Corinne~ We are neighbors!!!!! I'm in Georgetown, up from Cool. This is neat! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ This is so lovely ... 'My mind expects oceans But I’ll take mountains, rivers with you On any Sunday.' *Isn't it nice to know that there are 'boring' people out there who can't write POETRY ... so they write nasty e-mails ? I got one of those once ... guess what I did ? YEP ! Wrote a poem about it and used the 'psuedo' name of the 'publishing' place as the title. Published it on a site that I knew the idiot had seen my poetry on. It was titled Ashes In The Wind and the poem was prettier than the nasty e-mailer deserved ! Well .... I'm here to tell you You are a POET ! So deal with it !  Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Corinne, I would have to agree with everyone else. You are now and have always been for as long as I have been in Passions.......a poet. A very good one at that. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Rupert Evans II Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 13 |
I really liked your poem. There was a lot of feeling adn emotion that come through and touched me. Thanks a lot Rupert |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Here here, and I loved this creation of yours, Corinne. Its reads with a certain and quite agreeable placidity...very nice! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, SEA, Marge, Marina, Rupert and Claire, thank you very, very much. Corinne |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
very passionate...one of my favorite poetry subjects. love the last stanza excellent expression "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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