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Trail of Tears
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Trail of Tears |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Trail of Tears < !signature-->Looking through the nursery window A proud tear in his eye Trying not to let them flow A deep breath and a sigh A Band-Aid for her knee And a kiss to make it better To his heart she holds the key And every one of his love letters The front row for graduation Sobbing, holding her diploma A car to say congratulations! She's off to college in Oklahoma He walks her down the aisle And a with a long hug goodbye For this, he’d walk a thousand miles She’s on her own now, and needs to fly She looks at the gravestone Thinking over the years And about all the love he’d shown Turning, she leaves… A trail of tears Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful tribute to a father. I know that pain accompanies this, but proud this man must have been. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Such a beautiful expression of lovely emotions, and what a flowing tribute! Great work, Marina, great work. regards, sudhir |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Wow, 'sob', That was such a touching poem, I almost broke in to fulfledged tears, I loved every minute of it . A wounderful tribute . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Oh, Marina this is so heartbreakingly beautiful, a tribute to a life well lived and very well loved. Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Being that I can't hardly see through my tears I'll be back to reply to this one a little later..... ......Ok, I think I can do this now  Marina, I say this with all Sincerety...My eyes have never had the privelage to read a more beautiful poem! You may never know how deeply your words have touched my heart! I just want to thank you for sharing this piece with us |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
And by the way...I hope you come back and click that little box so we can vote for this [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
sorry, I had to come back and add this one to my library |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is indeed awesome girl... very beautiful and heartfelt.. and I have to second Jefferys request... SUBMIT BABY SUBMIT!!!  (to the book- i mean)  LOLyou can submit to me later LOL LOL sorry..too much caffeine already today  later-perfect-poetry-gator jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marina~ A most enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I have taken your advice Jeff and marked it as a submit. Thank you!!!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
(click) and many regards, Sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh I just love getting my way thank you dear ... your such a good girl laterM-girl-gator jm |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I'm glad you decided to submit this one. It is so beautiful, and sad! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Marina, I can hardly even think of this poem without tears welling up....Oh, so beautifully written I had to come back and vote |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Marina, between you and Sudhir, I havent stopped crying....This is an absolutely beautiful tribute to a father. Well Done ! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
I must agree with everyone else..this one is a rare read. Just so beautiful and sweetly done. I really liked this one. I think I'll go call my dad now. love & all, -Holly I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of. Michel de Montaigne |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, Beautiful poem and touching tribute to your father. I feel the same way about mine. This was really wonderful writing. Just had to vote for it. LW Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you all very much!!!!!! When I posted this, I had no idea it would recieve this kind of attention. I would to thank everyone for their posts and compliments. A special thank you to Jeffery! Not just for your words in your posts, but for our conversation this afternoon. Thank you my friend. Jan......you spoiled brat!!!!!!! Always getting what you want!!!!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, you have penned a truly wonderful piece here my friend. . . reminds me of my own Father. . . Well done, simply beautiful. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Rodney Belcher Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 227Taylor, Michigan |
I just hope my daughter has half the emotion expressed in your piece...let alone the ability to express it... Love one another-let God do the worrying, Rodney |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh my, this was so graceful and heartfelt Bringing tears to my eyes and tuggs at my heart Coco |
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Leigh Anne Junior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 48Scottsboro, AL USA |
Beautiful poem, which made me think and treasure the time spent with my father, while I still have precious moments on earth! Leigh Anne~~~ To be a mother is to accept your heart will forever walk outside your own body!" |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Excellent heart felt poem..... Julie :) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marina your words really touched my heart...this is beautiful...James |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Thanks for sharing this with us...a touching tribute to a dad and a very emotional read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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nona Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 139Fla |
Marina Lovely fitting tribute to a man I know you loved,and who loved you. These were not just tears of saddness I think but also tears of joy of knowing the love and warmth I know you must have felt from him. I too had a Father like that and there isn't a day goes by I don't think of him even though he has been gone many years. I thank God everyday he was mine if only for a while. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Marina, Thanks for posting this wonderful but sad tribute. It got my vote. fh |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Lovely heartfelt poem Marina, you get my vote, Thanks for sharing Olias |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Marina, this was simply beautiful hon. Reminds me how lucky I am to still have both my Dads Beautiful and a must for the book, glad you decided to submit it I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Marina~ My dear, this is absolutely beautiful. Like Jeffrey, I had to finish crying in order to be able to write these words. You have totally taken my breath away. Such a tribute to true love between a father and daughter -- this is beauty beyond words! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Oh Marina, this is so touching and beautiful. You and your father are both very fortunate to have had the love you had for eachother and still have for him. So so beautiful. Thanks for sharing this special peace with all of us. kat |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you all once again!!!!!! This poem means a great deal to me. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Martinque Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 69 |
This is absolutley wonderful!!! Brought me to tears. |
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Bessy41 Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 12 |
A simple but true tribute to fathers and the realtionships with their daughters!! Beatiful!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful poem Marina, very sad but open to the freedom of the tears of grief. I enjoyed it very much.... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
We carry those treasured memories with us always ... loved your poem the Londoner |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Oh my...I absolutely loved this!!!!! It was soo full of memory!! What a very special tribute here!!! Wow!!! Loved this!!  Bridgette Back to the Top this is going!!!! "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I am really overwhelmed by the posts this poem is getting. Thank you all very much for compliments and your support. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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