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tracie66
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0 posted 2000-07-02 06:14 AM


Reality

The wind blows
The rain does fall
As I listen carefully
For your call

I wait for an eternity
Still I do not hear
You do not call
I wait in fear

For the wind
She does not blow for long
Never will I
Continue in song

For silence falls
Upon darkened sky
Reality hits
And I'm passed by


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


© Copyright 2000 Tracie Maree Collis - All Rights Reserved
ESP
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1 posted 2000-07-02 06:19 AM


Beautiful, Tracy...
Chillingly lovely.
I think it is brill!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

tracie66
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2 posted 2000-07-02 06:35 AM


Hey Lizzie thanks for your lovely reply, I wasn't quite sure on whether to post this or not. It's one of those poems that flows out and at the time your not sure what it means yourself so I hope everyone just interprets it as they wish  
Thanks Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Mike
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3 posted 2000-07-02 07:58 AM


We do each interpret poetry as we do life, within our own conceptions.  'Tis a fine poem, I enjoyed.
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-07-02 08:13 AM


I loved the flow and sentiments in this Tracie ... I'm so glad you did decide to post it ... it's lovely!

Best wishes,
/Kit

ethome
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5 posted 2000-07-02 08:20 AM


So sad but well done. Captures you heart's feelings.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2000-07-02 08:24 AM


Tracie,
Enjoyed the read.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-07-02 12:30 PM


Tracie~
When the wind blows - I let it take me where it will.
Enjoyed your thoughts.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-07-02 12:52 PM


perfect trac,
love the imagery of the wind and the silence
gave it a slightly haunted chill
well expressed emotions
take care
jm

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~LaoTzeTao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


tracie66
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9 posted 2000-07-03 03:41 AM


Mike~
Thanks alot   I appreciate your comments...Ta
Tracie~

Kit~
So glad you enjoyed this...thanks for you lovely reply  
Tracie~

Ethome~
It is a sad one. I think what i've written is that don't just wait around for it to happen for if you wait too long it's gone in an instant and chance has passed you by...or something like that  
thanks for you reply
Tracie~

Sy~
Glad you enjoyed it  
Tracie~

Marge~
So true, so wise...yes let it take us where it will never know where it may lead us  
Thanks Marge
Luv Tracie~

Janny~
Thanks very much for your reply, hope it didn't make you too chilly  
Love Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Paula Finn
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10 posted 2000-07-08 10:34 AM


i think we have all fekt the reality of being passed by...but you said it so well
Sven
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11 posted 2000-07-08 09:46 PM


Who could pass by a poem like this??

Just wonderful tracie. . . wonderful. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


bad little dog
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12 posted 2000-07-09 12:20 PM


very sad poem
enjoyed it though

Jamie
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13 posted 2000-07-09 01:37 AM


so sad,, but beautiful
tracie66
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14 posted 2000-07-10 03:23 AM


Paula~
Thanks hon  

Sven~
Oh you always have something so sweet to say...thanks freind  

Bad dog~
Glad you still liked even though it's a little sad
Tracie~

Prom~
Thanks for replying...it's appreciated  
Tracie~



Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Beth
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15 posted 2000-07-10 03:32 AM



~Beautiful~
Enjoyed it
Blessed Be, Beth

tracie66
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16 posted 2000-07-12 06:36 AM


Beth~
Thanks so much for your reply  
Tracie~
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Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



[This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 07-12-2000).]

ma miller
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17 posted 2000-07-12 09:04 AM


I usually find centered poetry difficult to read, but the flow of your poem works very well in this format ... I liked it.
tracie66
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18 posted 2000-07-13 04:24 AM


MA~
Thanks for that, I appreciate your comments

Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Bill Charles
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19 posted 2000-07-13 08:00 AM


Tracie66,
Enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing it.

Michael
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20 posted 2000-07-13 08:04 AM


Ouch - this one hurt to read... Well done poem though.

"For silence falls
Upon darkened sky
Reality hits
And I'm passed by "

That sounds alot like me at one time...
((HUGS)) tracie... and a   for good measure.

Michael

Kit McCallum
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21 posted 2000-07-13 10:02 PM


Oh Tracie ... this is just so lovely and poignant ... beautifully written!

Best wishes,
/Kit

tracie66
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22 posted 2000-07-16 03:37 AM


Bill~
Glad you enjoyed   thanks for you comments
Tracie~

Michael~
I'm so glad it's not you anymore (it does hurt doesn't it)Thanks for your lovely comments and the Hug & smile much appreciated.
Love Tracie~

Kit~
Thanks hon   always appreciate you popping by.
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


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