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redheart angrybraids
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0 posted 2000-06-29 03:51 PM


One feeling three times
celebrate our loss and mourn. Be blind
stay inside and still
reach and claim your peace. I am eating myself
alive and I can't hear anyone.


Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

© Copyright 2000 Amelia A. Ensign - All Rights Reserved
Jamie
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Blue Heaven
1 posted 2000-06-29 04:21 PM


blind eye , can't hear....do i sense some fear?
very sublime
jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



serenity blaze
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2 posted 2000-06-29 04:58 PM


man o man, do I know this...sometimes I feel like we write to each other in secret code...you have a way with opposing metaphor that befuddles but effectively produces anxiety in this reader....thanks alot redheart...lol...love the pic, too..
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2000-06-29 05:10 PM


This is very good and I hear and see a lot in this piece. Are you OK? If you ever need a shoulder, I am here.



Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


Enola
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4 posted 2000-06-30 08:41 AM


Thanks for the reply to my poem, and the fact that it drew me to read this one.  It's stunning. Rather brutal, but very effective.

The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.


redheart angrybraids
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5 posted 2000-07-03 01:22 PM


yes this rather vague and undescriptive, though, it does have personal meaning, i'm sorry not to explian.
it's a route of emotions,
kindly,
myself to yourself and living< !signature-->

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids


[This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (edited 07-03-2000).]

kaile
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6 posted 2000-07-03 07:09 PM


i like this....it seems to convey powerful emotions without directly telling the reader about its pain and anguish....i like poems which make the reader think a little
redheart angrybraids
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7 posted 2000-07-10 04:00 PM


kaile=hello, thank you for reading, i to like poems that make you wonder.


Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

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