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amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
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Dublin,Ireland

0 posted 2000-06-29 03:05 PM


Your cold words still stings
My heart no more sings
Thinking loud about why it went wrong
Time and again it was your indifference
We all make some amends for what we do
I guess thats not in you , atleast not for me
Nothing you write will ever change it
Our love was just dimly lit
It could've been better not this bitter
May be sometime someday you'd realize
That my love for you never faded
It's because you're still in search
But I've failed to search after I found you
We're not mean't to be
We're not mean't to be
Thats all I hear from you now
And your cold words still stings

Sincerely
a_l

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1 posted 2000-06-29 04:04 PM


A_L~ this is so full of heartache and pain, so very touching and sad.......   -SEA

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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-06-29 05:10 PM


Nice writing Amazon...yes some words really do sting...some seems so strong like words of death...and silent words that are not said that we want to hear can also sting.  James
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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3 posted 2000-07-02 11:19 AM


a_l...even words left unsaid cut like a knife when the love dies..but some loves are better off dead
ESP
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since 2000-01-25
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4 posted 2000-07-02 11:25 AM


Words, spoken or unspoken cut worse than a double-bladed knife. You express the pain so beautifully.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2000-07-02 11:45 AM


Somethings are'nt mean't to be. The change is drastic and those cold words really do sting. Well concieved material.
Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
6 posted 2000-07-02 12:07 PM




A sadly beautiful poem. Your pain is evident and leaps out from your poem causing the reader to feel it.  The phrase "sticks and stones make break my bones, but, words will never hurt me" is completely untrue, cruel words can pierce the heart, rejecting the soul when said by a person you love.  I know all too well how that feels.  Hugs to you  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

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