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and dead things smell... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I'll forgive you for that door slammed in my face. I'll walk away, is no disgrace for me, I'll walk the block-- confused.. (something wrong with the way I knocked?) Pain beckons--I refuse. I'll leave you locked behind your walls. This haven soon will be your hell. So much puzzle left to ponder... and if you rot, an odor dwells... The next to be so brave to knock will know what lies beyond your door... I love you much. I wish you well. But truth is truth, and dead things smell. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
damn...*goosebumps*...damn love you girl get some sleep now baby me |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Powerful poem! Excellent writing! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
y'know, I knew this was a bit acerbic, sorry gang, serenity is moody from lack of sleep again...thank you Janet Marie, and me humble apologies for giving ya the spookies first thing in the morn...and insect, so glad it didn't "bug" you...gawd do I need some sleep!!! [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
no baby..it wasnt the "spookies" ... it was awe ... and the things I felt in that poem... YOU KNOW...I KNOW ... the poem is brilliant ... the poet is awesome sleep me twin... ~Lullaby~ miles to go before I sleep, prayers to say, promises to keep ... rest now my child let your weary heart run wild find your peace in my company close your eyes to the night hold on to morns light delivered each day by destiny sleep now till tomorrow dreams know no pain or sorrow fates gifts of reverie a lullabye to say a light to find your way the future for us to see all your promises now kept peace found while you slept lay down in sheets of sanctuary kiss the moon and touch the sky on wings of doves you fly in your dreams you fly free steal the night and hold the sun then rest when this day is done sweet dreams for my sweet serenity |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ps... you know Mike's rules of poetry... "just write" "dont BURN poetry" well Im adding one... never apologize for poetry written from your soul ... GOT ME!!  dont make me walk there on me lips to tell ya in person  *kiss kiss* me loves ya me |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
wowee! This is one slick piece of writing. "I love you but if you shut yourself up and rot and begin to smell....." LOL! Talk about a velvet sledgehammer! I love it  |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, chills is right, this is effective, powerful, great...shall I keep going? really love this! |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
hello dear serenity, i love how you can anchor a whole window, in the palm of words, it's always an intensr wittness. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--girl you are so sweet, ya make my tooth--ah never mind....thanks for the lullabye replay...must have worked, I am bright-eyed, and bushy-ah, nevermind...loves ya muchly... Balladeer, your praise always means so much to me, I bow in deference... Corazon--thanks to you, me friend...I do feel so much better now... redheart--thank you, will e me girls later... thanks to all, and back to the show... |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
A powerful, and heartful poem! Well done! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Mmmhhhmmm,....I agree....lots of power behind your words. I liked this piece so much for the way it was written and the message it leaks. I have given this message before too. So well done. *Peace. ~BTW,...the title kicks butt!!!  .[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
{rising to applaud} YES!!! FABULOUS piece of writing... strong, true!, succinct, pounding, dynamic! Please submit this for Voices on the Web. I'll be there to vote in a heartbeat! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very impressive constitution you've developed here ... awesome poem Rex}>{{{{o> |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank ye much, daniel, and a Welcome To The Forum!!! Looking forward to reading you... Spitfire---I wish I knew how to that damn winky-thing...have been a fan of yours for some time...I'll try to type more often...but it's not my forte'...thank you.. doreen---need to e ya soon, I thank you twice, three times even, for the lovely attention you've shown to me...made me feel good, it did... Rex Allen,---my friend from the beginning, I thank you much, just for showing up...was worried about for you awhile... and I would like to thank ALL the members of the Academy...lol...(serenity exits, blowing kisses...) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hey, when did I ever say "Don't BURN poetry." I do it all the time. Well, not literally -- poetically. (now who's tired ? ) Goodnight, S'en. Great poem. I can truly say, it doesn't stink or rot. (I REALLY need sleep)Mike |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Loved your poem......very determined and to the point!!! Julie :) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is SO powerful...what you have captured in this....I'm in awe of your work girl! I'm sorry I missed this one earlier...but very glad I'm here to read it now. You nailed it! |
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