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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2000-06-28 11:40 PM


-never had a chance to-
freestyle

Long after the wedding bells stopped chiming.
Long after the rice was swept up, thrown away.
Long after the car was sold.
Long after your children grew up, moved away.
Long after your house fell to grass
And you moved to a different hill.
Long after the ocean was closer to the shore than ever.
Long after you lost the thrill.
Long after the cataracts in your eyes made the sky a blinding white.
Long after the clouds evaporated at the seams.
Long after a mudslide pushed your house into itself.
Long after you gave up your dreams.
Long after she cheated on you and you cheated on her.
Long after you praised condoms more than your old etched cross.
Long after you were placed in a box and fell asleep in dirt.
Long after we forgot why we felt such loss.
Long after we held hands, thinking it was a chain.
Long after the links broke free.
Long after we cooed lies into each other's ears.
Long after we were no longer free.
Long after the ringing of the phone through the cold air in the morning
Was enough to make you shiver in bed.
Long after everything we never had a chance to regret.
Long after the things we never said.


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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2000-06-28 11:45 PM


Mike~ I really enjoyed this..... it felt sad....   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB



Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
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2 posted 2000-06-29 12:26 PM


And long after someone still cares?
Nice.
jamie

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-06-29 01:02 AM


Long after the ocean was closer to the shore than ever.
Long after you lost the thrill.
--------------------
Long after you gave up your dreams.
Long after she cheated on you and you cheated on her.
Long after you praised condoms more than your old etched cross.
Long after you were placed in a box and fell asleep in dirt.
Long after we forgot why we felt such loss.
Long after we held hands, thinking it was a chain.
Long after the links broke free.
Long after we cooed lies into each other's ears.
Long after we were no longer free.
Long after the ringing of the phone through the cold air in the morning
Was enough to make you shiver in bed.
Long after everything we never had a chance to regret.
Long after the things we never said.
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you know I'm smiling at you(for you)(with you)....right?
you know I love this one too ... right?


long after you lay down your poets pen...
long after you cease to write a single line
your poems will speak and stand for you
long after you run out of verse and rhyme

later-fav-poet-gator
jm/bs



you can say baby
baby can I hold you tonite
maybe if I said the right words
at the right time
you'd be mine
baby can I hold you tonite

Tracy C

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-06-29 05:52 AM


okay, okay, a litany of sobering thought...
(normally, I hate sobering thought, but so much story in these lines...)  keeping me thinking, you are...

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-06-29 06:04 AM


Nicely penned Mike ... I enjoyed it much!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
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6 posted 2000-06-29 08:34 AM


Wow Mike your freestyle like a pro...this
was very moving and held so many thoughts
and feelings...you were swimming in the
deep end of the feelings pool!!!  Excellent
work!

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2000-06-30 12:50 PM


Thanks, everyone. And Butterflies_dont_cry, you got it right, there. I've been having a bad couple of days, and here's my attempt to swim back into the middle. Thanks, friends.

Mike

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