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Silent soul
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0 posted 2000-06-28 02:02 PM


I wrote a poem called "lucky" and now im back with a lucky part 2 if ya want read the other one just say so and i'll post it again

I cant understand why you did this you see
You really hurt you but you REALLY HURT ME

Of all things you've done
I just can't understand hun

What made you do this
To end your life by cutting both wrists

With a letter above your head
Saying how much better it would be if you were dead

Now that your gone
I think to myself what did I do wrong

As I watch them lower you down
I mumble softly "life's meaningless w/out you around

I'll try to go on and be the real happy me
I once used to be



peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

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Silent soul
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1 posted 2000-06-28 03:24 PM


people PLEASE REPLY please



peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

AMaZing
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since 2000-06-26
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2 posted 2000-06-28 05:23 PM


I would love to read your other poem entitled Lucky...Could you post it again please..Thanks..

Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula
3 posted 2000-06-28 05:57 PM


I think I may have read your first one... but I"m not sure... so why don't you post it again.  That was a heart torn poem... but very well written.  Keep your chin up, and you'll be ok.     

"The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper."
Eden Phillpotts
*Cassandra Roseen*

Silent soul
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4 posted 2000-06-28 06:52 PM


ok im posting it right here

Lucky is what you think
when you here about this girl
She has everything she could possibly want
but yet does not go and flaunt

Is it the hurt she has inside
that she cant possibly deny
her life is great yeah its true
then why everyday does she feel blue

she has no more tears
She'll end it all right here
No one understands just how she feels
Its a feeling that just says kill

Would anyone miss here or even care
She thinks to herself know who would
And ends all right here for good

There it is tell me what ya think and is the 2nd part apporitate for the first part



peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 73
tx,usa
5 posted 2000-06-29 08:59 PM


people please tell me what ya think i would apreciate it

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

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