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A Dream's Continuation.....
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A Dream's Continuation..... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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A Dream’s Continuation…. Ah companion mine, soul-scarred friend, from what depths you have penned your emotions and tears, your sorrows and fears, believe me, I do comprehend. Would that I have a wand in hand would that I were yours to command, would that I end all your fears, would that I could dry your tears a wave of the wand her memory to ban. Take a breath, breathe slow and deep and travel into tranquil Morpheus’ sleep, so that I may inhabit your dreams to warm you in sunlight bright, to guide you with moonbeam light. Now in this dream your future appears see you as the gallant man, a man of cheer, now hold this hand, forever yours, and take this heart, thus assured that from a dream I will appear… to be your reality, your dream, sincere…. 27 June 2000 ©Karilea Rilling Jungel Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I thought for a minute I was reading something written by Billy Shakespeare's sister. "Would that I have a wand in hand would that I were yours to command would that I end all your fears would that I could dry your tears a wave of the wand her memory to ban." Very nicely done Sunshine I enjoyed every word! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Ethome, what a lovely compliment...and I can't even claim him as a long-lost cousin! Thank you! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A really nice, artistic work. Confused on one thing however....would that I could dry your tears a wave of the wand (HER) memory to ban..... Now in this dream your future appears see you as the gallant (MAN), a(MAN) of cheer,... At first I thought the subject was a she.. < !signature--> Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh dear friend of mine, you offer words of peace to me As from your words emerge much needed rest, to this restless eye Tranquility, I gain from pure heart of yours, a calm sea On this pinnacle of confused emotions hitherto stand I. A guardian angel from within my dreams, Amazingly pleasant, so calm as it seems, My scarred heart for repair belongs to you, In another life, I promise to be in view. Sacred words from you, help calm this soul, Can I ever repay the debt to I owe to you, All this life, the next ones too, my goal, Will be to offer sincere regards to you, true. Karilea, I am forever indebted... Thank You. Sudhir. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Sunshine~ This is so lovely! Words so true could only come from the heart. Beautiful thoughts flood into my heart, of a love that could be this strong. to be your reality, your dream, sincere... ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Prometheus...you cannot always tell a book by its' cover...if I were to tell you to read it as if a woman were speaking to a man who had been jilted...does that help? and Thank you for your kind comments... Sudhir...what can I say. Your comment here is hauntingly lovely, take it, expound on it, post it, for it is another masterpiece that you have created...every woman will think it is for her... Terry, thank you. You will find that here in Passions, we all lead each other on to better pieces, daily...[sometimes hourly, if you're not careful!] A belated WELCOME to Passions! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, I will do so as you desire...soon regards, sudhir |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
so many scarred hearts that need mending for sure....are you sure it is a job you want to take on?????? Great poetry...  Julie :) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ah Julie, bring them on, sunshine is a cure, y'know, for all wounds... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Would That I could change the night. Would that I could light a light. Would that I could tell lifes draft. Would that I could sail your craft. A wonderful delightful piece. *L* |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Take a breath, breathe slow and deep and travel into tranquil Morpheus’ sleep, so that I may inhabit your dreams to warm you in sunlight bright, to guide you with moonbeam light. beautifully written Karilea, really beautiful. Much enjoyed. "Melodrama there in my kitchen sink Double vision the way it is Am I coming home to you again" Nicky wire [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Now in this dream your future appears see you as the gallant man, a man of cheer, now hold this hand, forever yours, and take this heart, thus assured that from a dream I will appear… These were fabulous lines written for a dear friend. Great writing, Sunshine. So uplifting and sincere.  LW Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sunshine, Very nice Doc |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sunshine, a poem written with the most tender sentiment...this is beautiful. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh everyone...thank you so much! I am very touched by everyones' comments...you have all filled my heart...thank you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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