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Dakota
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since 2000-05-25
Posts 125
New York

0 posted 2000-06-26 06:56 PM


She said my love, don't give up!
We can make it, just wait and see
It will work out, if we don't give up
Yes it will if its meant to be

Fates cruel hand, lands a crushing blow
Between your heart and mine
Trying so hard to make you know
The problems not yours , but mine

Yes my love , we made a date
In our love we would revel
I would be with my Soul Mate
If not for that blasted DEVIL

He toys with our hearts, and our minds
Doing his evil do
Piercing our souls with his tines
To sever my love for you

But what he does not understand
Is my love for you is true
Not even by divine command
Would my love be vanquished for you

As time goes by, I let out a sigh
For the life we could have led
No so long, no see ya, not even goodbye
Those words shall not be said

Forever more I will Love You Dear
From now to eternity
For every second , I shed a tear
For the Love that could not be


© Copyright 2000 David Ingraham - All Rights Reserved
Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-06-26 07:35 PM


beautiful but so sad. this one
had such a painful longing in it,
left my own heart aching for you.
excellent emotion from your heart!
take care
amy  

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




kat
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since 2000-05-20
Posts 387

2 posted 2000-06-26 09:49 PM


True love never dies
That kind of love is always there
When two soul mates find eachother
They're with eachother everywhere

For even when they're apart
There's a connection like no other
And no matter what is thrown in front of them
They will always find eachother

For I found my Soul Mate in my lifetime
and he's always here with me
I may not be able to see him all the time
But I feel his loving arms caressing me

For I love you my Soul Mate with all my heart
I love you, I always will
And no matter how much time we spend apart
For all eternity, I'll love you still


Dakota, this was so beautiful and sad it made me shed more then just one tear. It's so emotional for me. Thanks for writing it.



kat



Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
3 posted 2000-06-26 09:57 PM


I feel your pain in your words...which I suppose is as it should be.
star216
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 11

4 posted 2000-06-27 12:16 PM


Good poem but sad at the same time. Very dramatic. Eager to read more of your work.


Dakota
Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125
New York
5 posted 2000-06-28 10:04 AM


Thank you Amy.


Kat, as always your reply is that of a poet's heart. Nothing is more heart breaking than to not be with your Soulmate.

Prometheus, Yes you felt what I felt when I wrote it... Thank You.

Thank You Star, Sadness is part of life , always there, if it wasn't , we could not know Happiness....

Thanks again for all your replies everyone!

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2000-06-28 12:15 PM


The anguish is felt in every word.  You have touched the roots of my heart and I wish for you the happiness greater than this pain.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
7 posted 2000-06-28 12:37 PM


Dakota~
Your piece is so pain filled and sorrowful
as lost love often inspires, may you find
peace and healing through your writing. My
thanks to you for sharing this slice of your
heart~

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

8 posted 2000-06-28 12:43 PM


Well Dakota I confess I read this and tears flow down my cheeks.  Such expression of love so eloquently written touches my heart.
~ Not even by devine command would my love be vanquished to you ~ this verse is quite profound.

Coco

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