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JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
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0 posted 2000-06-26 03:40 PM


This is a song I have been working on.....songs are an avenue I have been interested in persuing for some time.....any HONEST feed back would be appreciated....It is sort of a rockin country tune...


Why should I tell you
what I long to say?
what difference will it make in the end?
why should I try
to stop you from leaving?
When all you really need
is to just get away....
away from the heartache
confusion and mistrust....
away from me darling
alone with your thoughts...
you will see then
that your better off without me
you will see then that
all you needed was space....
space to heal the heartache
space to let go...
I know you still love me
I know it's hard to let go
let go of a love that
you've had for many years
but in time all the tears
will dry.....


so why should I tell you
what I long to say?
why should I try
to stop you from leaving?
Why should I cry
all through the night?
What difference will it make
in the long run?

lying beside you
I feel your heart beat...
it is one of the many things
about you I will miss...
still I know you love me
after all I have done...
your heart in mine
I know we were one....

You tell me to tell you
all that i feel
tell me.....

why should I?

why should I tell you
of all the pain in my heart?
why should I tell you
oh how much I regret?
Why should I tell you
I don't want you to leave?

will it make a differnce
between you and me?


(repeat first chorus)
Fade out....

© Copyright 2000 Julie Ann Ferrer - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-06-26 07:02 PM


well I dont know nothing about writing song lyrics
but i know i like this ones words and emotions...much!!
just be glad ya cant hear me singing...
its like cat scratch fever lol
great writing JA
jm

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2000-06-26 07:33 PM


Julie
ahemmm darn you caught me...i
was singing   god that sounded
awful but this poem err song was
wonderful! i really liked the words
to this and put to music i am sure
it would be beautiful!
take care.
amy  

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




Sven
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East Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-06-27 12:04 PM


Very good Julie. . . humming some tune in my head. . . now if I only could write it down!!

I'm sure that you'll be able to find someone to help you with this. . . excellent!!

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Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
4 posted 2000-06-27 01:24 AM


Get George Jones to sing it and you may have a hit....( i sat and sang it to the tune of "if drinkin don't kill me)...
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