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I Remember
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I Remember |
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FadingSun Member
since 2000-05-01
Posts 76Southern California |
This poem is one of many written about and for my true love. We were deeply fond of each other for four years, neither never knowing how the other felt. One night, I finally broke down, and confessed my intimate feelings, only to find she, too, felt the same. "I Remember" is about that night. "I Remember" I Remember the pitter-patter of the rain, As it danced on the car roof that night. I Remember my overwhelming nervousness, My palms sweating and my tongue tied. I Remember the talk and the laughter, And all the silences in between. I Remember exactly how you smiled that night, As you had so many times in my dreams. I Remember the surprise on your face, When I finally gave into my heart. I Remember waiting for your answer, As we sat there in the dark. I Remember how you looked at me, As you so nervously gave your reply. I Remember that last moment of silence, As I fell deeply into your eyes. I Remember as our bodies closened, That feeling of long awaited bliss. I Remember how my heart cried tears, As our lips shared that ever passionate kiss. I Remember everything about that night, Your smile, your eyes, the smell of your hair. And whenever our lips meet again in kiss, Everytime...I'm taken back there. In the sight of Love, fear isn't even as great as a single hair: in the law of Love, everything is offered as a sacrifice |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
What a story you have to tell, FadingSun--and how well you told it. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Very nice poem  Coco |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this was beautiful! and i related to it more than you could possibly ever know! thank you so much for sharing, you brought back some memories for me too. take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
FadingSun~ What beautiful memories to recall. Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hello U This is so incredibly beautiful....what a memory to behold, so tenderly written Sunnyboy this I liked immensely..well doneTake care Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Such a wonderful poem, this one... from the heart, makes music in the innermost parts of the soul... Very well done...Thanks a lot for sharing your pleasant memories ... regards, sudhir. Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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FadingSun Member
since 2000-05-01
Posts 76Southern California |
Thank you everyone for your replies. Every poet in this forum is unparalleled as a writer and person. I deeply cherish all you have to say. And Tracie, most of all...thank you. Again, "Melting Moment" will be a poem I will always cherish. S~ In the sight of Love, fear isn't even as great as a single hair: in the law of Love, everything is offered as a sacrifice |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow beautiful memories turn into a beautiful poem! I am so happy for you! Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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