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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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If there were no words For me to use in my songs How would I be heard You for whom I long? Would you know how I feel If I could not to you my heart reveal? If there were no way For me to tell you my love How would I to you say That you are like the truest dove? Would my voice to you be heard If I could not sing like the sweetest bird? If I could not tell To you the love that I know If I were under a spell That would not let my love show How would you know my heart? Enter my open arms, it's a good place to start ---------------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Where do you get this gift of rhyme? Could I trade my muse for thine? For words of love I then could write and you would get no sleep at night. _______________________ As always, Sven, Excellent poem!  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Sir Sven this is sheer beautiful poetry...the ever romantic sven wields his muse and steals the queen's heart... I might be a moron and be wrong, but I think I see two lines flowing in parallel like a stream...duh? what do I mean...okay..lets do a split... If there were no words How would I be heard Would you know how I feel If there were no way How would I to you say Would my voice to you be heard If I could not tell If I were under a spell How would you know my heart? and For me to use in my songs You for whom I long? If I could not to you my heart reveal? For me to tell you my love That you are like the truest dove? If I could not sing like the sweetest bird? To you the love that I know That would not let my love show Enter my open arms, it's a good place to start ... geez, I must be seeing things now anyway, I enjoyed reading it very much... regards, sudhir. Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Beautiful, Sven as always. You are the master of romance Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*sigh* Ever the romantic! How do you do it sir?  |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Sven~ Once again...beautiful...simply beautiful!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sven, I admire how skillfully you've accomplished the rhythm pattern in this piece, and the inversion gives it such a timeless feel...wonderfully crafted, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ You've a heart of gold - 'How would you know my heart? Enter my open arms, it's a good place to start' Lucky would be the one you enfold. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I enjoyed your poem very much!!!!! As always,Beautiful poem!!!!!! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sven~ As always, beautiful. You know I was thinking about you right before reading this. I was thinking what would I do if I couldn't read Sven's beautiful and romantic poems on a regular basis. For you see you have become a inspiration to me and many others I'd dare say at this forum. Thanks so much for sharing your beautiful and breathtaking work! Take care. Amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful romantic writing my friend. Great job . . . LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you to everyone who replied. . . it just amazes me every day how wonderful you all can be. . . TA, my muse is Romance, simple and pure a disease for which there is no cure her light is gentle, her light is bright she fills my days, she can fill your nights. . . Sudhir, your analysis is correct my friend!!! But I really didn't intend it to be that way. Sometimes, I'll have a form in mind. . . sometimes, not. . . most of the time, I just let it happen. . . like with this poem. . . thank you!!! Melissa, "the Master?" well, I don't know about that. . . I just write from my heart. . . thank you. . . Lorraine, thank you so much!! Claire, thank you my friend. . . can I just say that I didn't plan it this way?  Marge, you're right! Sudhir does have a heart of gold!! LOL But I know that you think that I do too!!! Thank you my friend. . .vandana, I see that you've been digging through the archives. . . thank you. . . Amy, I know that your life would go on if you didn't get to read my work. I am indeed humbled and touched that you would look at me as an inspiration. . . *Very embarassed!* LW, thank you so much. . . I try. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Sven~ You are a master of romance... Your poems seem so heart felt, I'm amazed... Wonderful job, I can't wait for your next one. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Perhaps your sweet song Is something she did long But the tune, is wrong Maybe in the end Through words she has penned You will see........you have a friend Marina |
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