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JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
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0 posted 2000-06-25 01:01 AM


too much
too little
too soon
too late
can't erase the heartache
can't place the blame
can't undo what has been done
can't even tell you why
can't understand what happened
between you and I
pondering every moment
trying to make sense
of a love so intense
over and over in my head
all those hurtful words we said
differences
clashing
like the tide against the shore
rushing in unnoticed
always wanting more
a love so strong
yet so wrong
passions flame
a lovers game
a wall we couldn't climb
our loves destruction was a crime
your hand in mine
we were looking for a sign
something to show us it was real
someone to tell us how we should feel
a real love should come easy
without struggle or fight
connected
unbroken
tightly sealed at the seams
a true love only exists
deep in my dreams.....



Julie :)



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CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
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1 posted 2000-06-25 01:10 AM


Very nice expression and presentation
   Coco  


[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 06-25-2000).]

Mark Bohannan
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2 posted 2000-06-26 12:55 PM


Julie- almost missed this one due to a busy weekend.  Glad I caught it.  

"our loves destruction was a crime"

powerful words.  The whole piece absolutely wonderful.

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-06-26 01:10 AM


JulieAnn~

'a real love should come easy'

It comes easy ... it just leaves real hard !

Well done.
~*Marge*~



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Mike
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4 posted 2000-06-27 10:08 AM


Nicely written.  Enjoyed your poem.
Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-06-27 10:36 AM


wow...this is great..so expressive and
i like the way it builds and builds
up in its intesity of emotions...
very well written JA.
so many great lines...
so many hard questions ...
love makes us work for the answers sometimes
take care
jm


baby dont you work so hard
for this prize you've found,
it will all be gone-when you turn around,
cause nothing lasts forever anyway.
Rick Roberts

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6 posted 2000-06-27 12:03 PM


This is a wonderful piece! I can relate to it so well. I've felt everything you've written. The only advice I can give you is to hold on to your dreams as long as you can, and when you can hold on to them no longer, don't fight it. Just let it go.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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7 posted 2000-06-27 12:40 PM


Emotionally intense and very much expressive... beautiful poetry...

JulieAnn, its great to read your poetry..

regards, sudhir

Death, be not proud, though some have called thee,
Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so;

- John Donne

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