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That Star (Repost - for the book)
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That Star (Repost - for the book) |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada 
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That Star And then it happened. Perhaps it had been that way All along I don't really know. But looking back over the journey That brought me to it I realize that I may have passed it by A thousand times A single star In an endless sky It went unnoticed for years. One moonless summer night Enveloped in a cool breeze Alone in a clearing Lost in the smell of pine And new clover A young man gazed upward And the night revealed to him Its hidden beauty And time ceased to exist. Its beauty was so simple So pure That single star was so bright That it captivated the young man And he watched in awe Until the gentle glow Of an August dawn filled the sky. The man never saw that star again Though he searched often When he was alone Others doubted his story At times, he doubted himself But in his heart, he knew. The beauty was real The innocence was real And in a way it was his Only his. I, too, have seen that star It shone with more beauty More innocence And more purity Than any star in the sky. For one brief moment, that star Shone in your eyes And time, for me Ceased to exist. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Hi Trew! Glad to see you finally submitted this for the book! It is truly exceptional work! By the way....did I say how much I love this poem? All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
This is beautiful. *big big sigh* Just beautiful!  ~Heather |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
god this is SO beautiful amazing imagery the emotions of it are perfect... your free verse is excpetional I envy you as i cant do it like this (have this rhyming affliction)  this is a perfect choice to reflect you in the book... If i have not done so already-- welcome to passions there have been so many new poets of late Im hoping I am caught up... wouldnt want to miss a gem like this, take care, jm |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Trew... i just read your reply to my poem... we must have been reading each others poems at the same time... hows that for poetic fate I just wanted to come back and thank you for such a wonderful and encouraging reply it was heartfelt by me ... I appreciate it very much take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Isnt it amazing what a little faith can do...always believe in the unbelievable...thats when you see stars.....wonderful wonderful |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Trew, Fabulous poem!!! Happy to see you have submitted it for the book. Great work!!!  LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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minneouw New Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 6 |
this is so beautiful... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Stunning!!!! This is just so beautiful...that brightest of all stars the light of faith. I love this poem. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I, too, have seen that star It shone with more beauty More innocence And more purity Than any star in the sky. For brief one moment, that star Shone in your eyes And time, for me Ceased to exist. I wonder if I saw that star too, i had a similar experience on a cold winter night my poem is called "winter star." I really enjoed your poem. Quite beautiful. "I see myself as an intelligent, sensitive human, with the soul of a clown which forces me to blow it at the most important moments". Jim Morrison |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
This is too good a poem to just let it fall by the wayside So.....Back to the top All my love, Jeffrey |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The stars that shine the brightest most always come from within,, until we look into a loved ones eyes our stars will always be dim.....this is the thought it gave to me.... thanks for the words that invoked it. Very good work. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) A beautiful weave, you have a gift to draw the reader in and captivate their heart and mind while reading, thank you for sharing your gift~ |
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