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Aimster
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0 posted 2000-06-24 11:17 AM


You’re on the right track
Keep holding your head high
Dreams are becoming yours
Reach and touch the sky

River of life
Can be dangerous and full of chance
Don’t go in the deeper waters
Be safer just to glance

Watch behind your back
Protect the one you love
You’re going to need each other now
More than you ever dreamed of

Treacherous territory
But there is much to gain
There is no going back
Things never to be the same

Reach your hand out to her
She will hold on tight
And together you will walk out of darkness
Into the bright sweetness of light

Tides of water flowing in and out
But believe in yourself
Don’t get carried away by illusions
And never give into self-doubt

In your heart and soul
Lies the truth and what is real
Do not deny who you are
Your thoughts or how you feel

Believe in her as she believes in you
This isn’t wrong…but tread with care
Patience you need more of
Let yourself fall completely, that’s if you dare


The end will be so sweet
Watch and you shall see
That the truth was always with you
And this is meant to be



"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




© Copyright 2000 Amy Kennedy - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-06-24 11:21 AM


How about The Bright Sweetness of Light? I liked your use of that phrase and it could be fitting for a title.

Elizabeth


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I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



Aimster
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2 posted 2000-06-24 11:28 AM


Elizabeth~

Thanks for the title! It fits wonderful
with this piece. Thanks a mil girl!
Take care.
Amy  

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




JulieAnn
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3 posted 2000-06-24 11:34 AM


it seems i am reading alot of poetry these days that i can relate to and this really touched me and made me think....Thank you for this post...Great writing...as for a title.....I agree it would be great!!!  

Julie :)



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4 posted 2000-06-24 11:40 AM


Glad to help, Amy!

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-06-24 04:37 PM


amy this is perfect and beautiful
and wisdom filled.
such a lovely message
believe in our dreams..
reach for the stars...
i love this one..
its so full of my sunshine girl  
love ya gator-girl
jm

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6 posted 2000-06-24 04:42 PM


I agree on the title...good'un!
I liked this poem, it felt very much like something that should be included in a wedding card...

~H

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7 posted 2000-06-24 04:51 PM


This is beautiful, Amy! So positive and inspiring. Lovely expressions you have in it.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

brian madden
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8 posted 2000-06-24 05:02 PM


Amy a wonderful poem. How about "Aspirations".  Beautifully written and filled with hope.

Treacherous territory
But there is much to gain
There is no going back
Things never to be the same

Reach your hand out to her
She will hold on tight
And together you will walk out of darkness
Into the bright sweetness of light

Tides of water flowing in and out
But believe in yourself
Don’t get carried away by illusions
And never give into self-doubt




[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-24-2000).]

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9 posted 2000-06-24 05:22 PM


Amy~
Lovely thoughts.
~*Marge*~


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Aimster
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10 posted 2000-06-24 07:28 PM


wow thanks much you all for your
replies and suggestions. i like both
titles lol...both seem fitting. you guys
make my writing feel that much more
special. i thank you from my heart!
love,
amy

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




BSC
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11 posted 2000-06-24 07:31 PM


What a perfectly tender poem, just so lovely.  Bonnie
Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2000-06-25 08:36 AM


Amy, this poem is full of lovely thoughts...

Has a nice flow and vividity too...

Enjoyed reading this one.
Regards, sudhir.

As for the title, you have two good suggestions, could use either...



Death, be not proud, though some have called thee,
Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so;

- John Donne

Lorraine Nisbet
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13 posted 2000-06-25 09:51 AM



Beautiful poem, Amy!  Both suggested titles fit wonderfully!!

~Lorraine


A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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