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Is it You? Speak to Me...[repost]
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Is it You? Speak to Me...[repost] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Is it You? Speak to Me. Oh my poetic visionary and lover most extraordinaire could I be your loved one, would I even compare to those you've loved and lusted in your life's long-ago or would you rather me not even begin to know? Tho I cannot give you my all and everything, just my entire being for all of its earthly worth, for when I read your words of giving and love I feel as if I've been newly and lustily birthed. You open all my senses, I feel as if you're the sun by entering my private areas, those I've kept for The One. Is it you? Are my dreams encompassed in your speech of poetry and prose and rhymes that for me beseech? Not looking for this feeling, your words have left me reeling, I hesitate to speak for my knees have gone weak. Is it you? Are you the one tho not sought have brought to me your earthly love that I did not seek? Or are you just a dream that I've webbed so fine and your words are spirits whispering through the pines as I lay here 'neath nature's window, alone but not despaired for at least your words have whispered that which I would share. 13 August, 1999 ©KRJ Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Another fine one, Sunshine...I love the metaphor of words whispering through pine trees. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Im lost for words Sunshine....except you have my vote. Olias |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Or are you just a dream that I've webbed so fine and your words are spirits whispering through the pines as I lay here 'neath nature's window, alone but not despaired for at least your words have whispered that which I would share. wonderful poem. especially love the last verse A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth, Olias, Brian...this stemmed from a movie...Jane Seymour says "is it you?" to Christopher Reeve, who she has seemingly met for the first time. I've not been able to get the feeling that she conveyed out of my system since. Thank you all for your kind words... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Ohhh I like this....*sigh* and I've seen the movie I am sure...what's the title??  ~H |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Gorgeous writing, Sunshine. It was fluid and articulate, and it captured a very strong emotion. Very nice indeed! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Is it you". These words possess such a tender longing woven within the heart of your poem. James |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
XAngel, Somewhere in Time, one of my ALL time favorites...and the music!... Trew, "fluid and articulate, and it captured a very strong emotion", such a nice critique, thank you... James, you are SO right! Thank you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
 Whew! I knew you really liked poetry but... wow, you must really like poetry!Very nicely done Sunshine, hopefully we'll see this in the book.  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gee, JP, now who's blushing?...I hope it makes the book too, but it may be that it needs some work... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very nice poem......now that I figured out how to vote i can vote for this....  Julie :) |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JulieAnn, how nice of you! Thank you so very much! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A Wowie!!! Amazing poem you had penned way back in August 1999, Karilea! Am I glad that you reposted? Yes I am... regards, Sudhir. Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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