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That Far Away Place
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That Far Away Place |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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That Far Away Place It was too long and hilly, the ribbon of road That carried me off to a far away place But still the tedious trek would unfold The flatlands and towns that I used to embrace The mountain roads gradually came to unwind To the low country now with its slow gentle ways And the same sandy soil and the same scent of pine Were like photographs out of those long ago days The straightaway blacktop led right to the town Not far from the beautiful Ashley, that flows Beside the plantation, in her sparkling gown And into the past my sweet memory goes For this is the place where I came in my youth I remember the house and the pond in the grove The closer I came to admitting the truth The faster it seems down the highway I drove I knew I was nearing the turn off at last Onto a dirt road and then round a small curve My heart started pounding remembering that day And my mind was entranced as the car took a swerve How would I be seen after all of these years Like a loved one's homecoming, welcome and warm Or more like a stranger trying to mend Years of a relationship, forgotten and worn There is the road, I remember it well The curve up ahead, now I pull to the side And as I get out of the car I can see Someone quickly peer through the curtain inside My feet are like lead on the dry sandy road Will I have to walk up and stand at the door Or will I be greeted midway with a kiss And warming embrace as we used to before Before I step forward, I stare at the ground And all the good memories swirl through my mind But a voice interrupts and says, is it you Who sent him that letter, so lovely and kind He was holding that letter the day that he died He said she was coming from out of his youth I never believed him, all of these years And now I can see he was telling the truth Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-24-2000).] |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
very beautiful, descriptive... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Elizabeth! How do you do it? Magnificent..I felt every flicker of fear and excitement!  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
The thoughts swirling ... anticipation building ... Wonderful and descriptive writing Elizabeth, really beautiful ... I "experienced" this one I did! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You are a remarkable writer. And a remarkable person. LOve Sy |
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Brett Martin Smith New Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 4 |
I really enjoyed this. It was a symphony for my soul - That ending really got me. Made me think - Thanks! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Jennie May, Thanks for commenting PDV, Glad you liked it. THanks Kit, You could have written this one, my poet twin Sy, The remarkable one is you Brett, What a lovely compliment Thank you Liz |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Liz, This was beautiful and very exciting to read! You are an excellent writer who leaves me in awe everytime your pen does its magic! My hat's off to you. Take care. Amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, now who's made a book into a poem...she must be able to make a poem into a book...Yes I loved this!!! Bravo! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
GREAT!!!! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh Liz, this is wonderful! I love the descriptions and the story itself. We all expect something beautiful from each of your posts, and you never dissapoint. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Liz, this is going straight into my library. A wonderful poem, that needs more time to be appreciated than what I have given it. Look forward to reading this again at my leisure. beautiful. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Beautifully descriptive, Liz! What a pleasure it is to read what you write. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Amy, Thank you for your enthusiasm. Your comments are very much appreciated Martie, WOW, what greater compliment could have come from you. Thank you, Martie Elizabeth, So glad you loked the poem, Thank you Lovebug, You're my little cheerleader, always inspiring me to write, Thanks Brian. I appreciate your reading my poetry and commenting on all of them. I appreciate this more than I can say Lizzie, Last but not least, thank you dear. You are so dear Liz |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
A great read, Elizabeth! I loved it!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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