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I see a lot of me in the snow
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I see a lot of me in the snow |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I see a lot of me in the snow. Everyone thinks you're beautiful, such a rare sight to behold. They think you're lovely, pure and deep, but they wish you weren't so cold. You appear with no warning at all and then suddenly you move on. They criticize you while you're here and then they miss you when you're gone. Time and again man will come with hands of blazing fire. He'll think to warm your icy nature with a taste of mortal desire. They presume to know your weaknesses. They try to bring you to your knees, but you have the power of an avalanche. You're as elusive as the breeze. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful piece; It flows perfectly and the words couldn't have been chosen better. Wouldn't it be great if people didn't have to prey on another soul to hide their own insecurities. As for me, I'll take you as you are and look forward to reading more of creations. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Tennessee Angel, Totally awesome, so much enjoyed, thank you for sharing. Cerenity |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Mark -- Wow, what a lovely response.  You're such a brave soul to take me as I am without knowing what you may be getting in to.  Cerenity -- Thank you for your kind response. I am so glad you enjoyed. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Tennessee, Hi there, thanx you for reading my one syllable poem and liking it...eager for your response and am here to return the favour like this muchly....your title is captivating and eye-catching but more importantly, it plays a vital part in helping the reader to understand the poem....such creative use of the title...well done  love the sentiments...how people only appreciate each other when the person is away from their lives...like the ending too...positive end, thrilling this reader to know the speaker in the poem is a survivor keep posting...will keep a lookout for your work from now on |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TennesseeAngel~ Now this is packed full of imagery. I certainly enjoyed this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Hi, Tennessee Angel! Great imagery here! Well captured!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
hell yeah, loved this poem, total just. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Tennessee, this is very cleverly done. I love it! You created a perfect simile between the two. Boy, I just love it when I see people use their brains and come up with such clever ideas. Consider me a fan |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
kaile -- Once again you have been too kind with your response. I am so glad that you caught the importance of the title. I originally wrote this piece without a title and found that, while I knew what I was speaking of, no one else probably would. Sometimes it is more interesting to leave the reader to their own interpretations, but on this one I had a clear message I wanted to convey. Thank you for such interest in my work! Marge -- Thank you so much for you nice response. Imagery is not something I'm very good at so your comments mean a lot. Lorraine & Redheart -- Thank you muchly for your kind responses. Balladeer -- You, a fan of lil' ol' me!?! Now that is a compliment and a half and this southern belle appreciates it greatly!! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This was AWESOME! I really liked this one much |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is just a wonderful poem. I love the way you did this! You are on my list of 'must read' poets now. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
WhtDove -- Thank you for your kind reponse. Poet deVine -- I am honored that you enjoy my work. I love it that you consider me a 'must read' poet. Thank you very much! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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